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Hindsight – Chapter 4
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When Alice had left I had undressed her, and that’s when the physical aspect of her suffering came and hit me in the face, just as Kits words had hit me only moments ago, along with the force of her anger as she slapped me, and even though I was on the receiving end of her palm, I understood, I understood her anger at how I could of let this happen.
I had removed her jeans and saw how much weight she had lost, and as I look at her this morning, in the light of day it was so much more obvious than when I saw her lying there last night…
She was still looking at me as we stood here in the silence, Angelica began to wriggle in her arms, wanting to get down and walk around what had been her home for the majority of her short life, but as Bette bent to put her down, she remained around the woman she had missed, who had missed her beyond any incomprehensible thing in her life.
“I’ve made you some coffee…” it was a stupid thing to say in the circumstances, but we were standing in silence, just looking at one another.
I watched her eyes take in the words and she sighed, slowly moving herself to the kitchen.
Angelica followed her, seemingly not wanting to let her out of her sight, I followed too.
“Is it okay if I make Angie some breakfast…?” I tentatively ask.
She turned to look at me then, the empty eyes that used to hold so much life in them, “sure… I’m not sure what I have here that would be okay for her though…”
“Its okay I brought her something…”
I watched her pour the coffee into a mug, bringing it to her lips slowly, blowing on the strong black liquid before sipping it, her eyes slipped closed as it hit her senses.
I silently prepared Angelica’s breakfast, looking at our daughter as she stood with her arms wrapped around Bette’s legs, I watched as Bette’s free hand quietly soothed the curls on our daughters head.
“Would you like to give it to her?”
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This is just gripping. Thankyou, it’s got me at the edge of my seat, I feel like I’m totally in that kitchen watching this breakdown and hopefully reuniting!!!..Pls jobage post soon….
“A little on the emotional side”….thats one way to put it!!!! LOL payback is so much fun xx
Jo, amazing…..i love it how you can read a fic, and feel everything that the characters are feeling….i dont usually feel that way, but this fic, it is amazing…you have an amazing talent, and a wonderful storyline…just 2 things…….POST LONGER AND FASTER!!!!!!!!….1,000 STARS FROM ME…..POST AGAIN SOON PLEASE…..I CAN’T TAKE THE WAITING…….LOL……
LMAO….I just saw Ally calling you a yokel, that goes hand in hand with JT and me calling you a country bumpkin LOL
Simply the best! Its like im there with them. Amazing writing!. Post soon.
Tina is a piece of work but I am glad that she is realizing the depth her actions but I still would like to throw her ass off the cliff into the waterall where Dana’s spirit lives on! I don’t have children but the pain must be unbearable to have your child taken from you with no communication at all. It’s mind boggling how many parents do that to one another and the children. I understand Tina was hurt from Bette’s so called kidnapping & custody, but what she did takes the fucking cake hands down. I am really trying to be good here and not call tina every name in the fucking book as I will allow her to say her piece, but it’s really hard. Post soon!
Wow Bette is one hell of a woman, comforting and supporting T in this very difficult situation, I love that – like I really really love your dialogues, so spot on….like always!!! Great Tina confessed about listening to all the messages, they’ve to be completely honest with each other. I give you 3 hours, then I expect chapter 5!!! xx
I felt like I was setting there looking at what was going on. I felt like I was intruding on something between to people that needed to be very private. that was very heart breaking. Even the baby was so happy,yet afraid that her other Mom was not going to be with her. Sad. thanks for the insight of broken hearts. thanks
I forgot: Bette deserves a gold star because I don’t think I would be comforting that wench after what she did. And I am glad that Bette has not fainted although I suspect it might be coming up soon! lol
Heart breaking, wonderful chapter
Wow!!!
wow that was a big bandaid at the end…beautiful J
Another Excellent chapter Job. I adore Tina,but what she’s done is really unforgivable. To deliberately keep someone away from thier child is just ruthless. Bette kidnapping Angie was bad,but not as bad as what Tina’s done. I for one,never had any sympathy for IC’s Chaiken’s Bette,but I feel terribly awful and heartbroken for what’s happend to Bette is this fic,perhaps I might feel for IC’s Bette now. The fact that she’s willing to comfort Tina while she finally has an apiphany regarding the pain’s she’s caused,shows that Bette is trying to forgive her. Bette really needs to be strong for her baby,and for the first time ever, I could care less what happens to Tina. I’m happy that she’s finally realized the pain she’s caused Bette,but she now she needs to help Bette heal mentally and physically. PPS.
Wow, Jo! So much pain and anger and love and dismay and honesty and…just the full range of emotions! You never cease to amaze me with how you flesh out their thoughts and motivations, and their love is always so apparent. Please continue quickly!
Even through all the pain that they have endured there is still something magical between them. Now, they have to decide how to handle that magic and how to move forward. They have reached that valley the bottom of the deep blue sea, but now it is time to climb back up or swim to the top. With Angelica’s help there is hope and a way to survive. Now it is up to them to take that step forward.
Tina did a bad thing but it is Bette that’s responsible for how she is now. Tina has been selfish but I think in some way it was protection mode because Bette had every intention of taking Angelica away from her. They have used Angelica against eachother so they’re just the same IMO.
what intense chapter, all of them, now that they are together they need to talk. they need to find the best way to live for the three of them
That was exceptionally mature of Bette to offer comfort to Tina, who may have just made some baby steps of her own towards maturity. Angelica is perhaps a bit farther down that path than Tina, but I suppose she can’t be all bad to have raised the child to that level. Now if everybody can learn to stand in the line of fire when things get tough and gut out the hard stuff, we may have something. Seems to me that’s what being a grown up is: to deal with the hard stuff, not run, not play games. May I also observe that emotions are the reason both for staying and for running. If one is really grown up and really loves, they stay and they deal.
WOW!!! In the end Bette has to hold Tina and let her cry. Why does that seem so wrong. But then agein that is Bette one hell of a woman!!! Thanks Jo PPS
great you know they need to be longer
So that ‘me’ time is really working out for you, and us, if you continue to write great stuff like that. Thanks mate.
Wow…this is some emotional stuff here. That was very big of Bette to offer Tina comfort…that’s love. Can they be saved? I hope so…they have a tough mountain to climb though. Tina is still with Henry. Please post soon.
Damn this is amazing, everytime I read this story I cry, its sad to see Bette and Tina like this. Tina need to leave henrydick, and come back to Bette and they talk and work thing out, she need to take care of Bette and Angel, and they will be a family again and forever. OK post soon please, thanks!
gosh, this is soooo good… heartbreaking…powerful. the only good thing is that i have faith and know that this is going to work well for our 2 favorite girls!
Your friends jokingly call you a “yokel” or a “rube”, a “country bumpkin”. I don’t know any yokels that write as you can. God, this chapter was brilliant as is this story. You have so many weapons in your writing arsenal. Sometimes you write devilish one pagers that are clever and spicy. Then you roll off this type of story that is painful, authentic but beautiful in its own right. Brava, Jo! For this Yank can you please define the word “clam”.
Beautiful.
I could feel Tina’s shame for what she put Bette through. Absolutely brilliant! Your writing always brings such emotion. I love it!!
this was very emotional to read, wonderfully written and you displayed both of their emotion levels so realistically…my heart goes to bette and tina, i hope angie will help to reunite them again
I’m not sure I’d be as nice as Bette and comfort Tina. I do have to give Henry a point for being understanding.
You must be tired of hearing this, but God what a story!!! An emotional rollercoaster is an understatement, and I love it so incredibly much… The stream of emotion that is lurking behind the corner, the inevitable L-word, is almost palpable… Please dont make me wait long for the update! Hug JLBT
No words can do you and this story justice. Just amazing, bring on the next chapter and thanks so much for sharing.
there are no words for this. it hits you right in the face and you can do nothing about it. i got all emotional. this is great writing.
wow. so intense and emotional. I can almost feel their pain. Awesome writing Jo! Can’t wait for the next chapter.
oh jo! its heavy in my heart…..great job hun. PPS xoxo
Jesus Joe you have brought me to tears every chappy. If it wasn’t for the fact, I BELIEVE you will bring them back together, i don’t know if I could handle more. Well it is beautifully written as well.WOW you are goooood!
Let the healing the begin and the realization that they need each other to survive. Tina needs to leave Henry and love Bette back the health. Bette and Angelica connection is beautiful!!!! PPS
my turn to be first on your chapter J – another stunning piece of realism. totally in awe of you and your writing talents, you are the only writer that i get really excited about reading — even if you are a clam and a yokel . xxxx great result for your woman as well !!!
I know there would be a season 5 if this was to happen on TLW. Can’t wait until next chapter. Please post soon. Your writing is awesome. So realistic.
Heart wrenching & Excellent! PPS