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I Will Not Let You Fall
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”NO!”
As the bullet pierced through the bone, the man let out an agonized wail again.
”Alright alright!” he whimpered in surrender. ”My…my name’s Hank…”
”Hank who?”
”…Morrison, Hank Morrison. My brother’s name…was Danny,” he breathed out, wincing.
”Who controls you?”
”Nobody… We’re simple street dealers…”
”This is a lie,” Bette declared before shooting the man in the shoulder, causing another excruciating cry.
”God…please…” he sobbed. ”I’ll tell everything… Please take the gun away…”
Bette searched his face for a moment, then leaned in closer. ”You need to understand, Hank. I’m only going to ask one more time, then I’m going to lose patience and start hurting you. You’ll see that up to this point, I’ve been gentle.”
”I’ll tell everything…”
”I’m waiting.”
”The guy that gave us the envelope, he…he offered us a job… When he came back to pay us the full amount, he said that we could work for him if we wanted.”
”I thought you found the money in your mail box?”
”No… The guy returned to give it to us…”
”What kind of job did he offer?”
”He said there were a few more people that needed to be taken out too, and for a good payment he wanted us to do it. He promised protection from the cops.”
”And you agreed.”
”Yeah…”
”He must’ve left you some kind of contact information,” Bette encouraged, feeling that the conversation was nearing resolution.
”Look in Danny’s pockets…”
Bette rummaged through the dead man’s pockets, first she searched his jacket, and when found nothing, she started to dig into the jeans pockets. Extracting a crumpled slip of paper from one of the pockets, Bette smoothed it out and studied it. There on the paper in a sloppy handwriting were written a phone number and a name. Bette reread the name. Her jaw went tight as she reread the name one last time.
”Doyle,” she said it out loud.
”Yeah… His name was Doyle something…”
Bette hoped it was the same guy she was thinking about. It was Doyle Bogan, the man that helped them cross the Mexico-US border. Bette rubbed her forehead, thinking . Why would Doyle Bogan help them and then hire two street dealers to kill them? Well, it was obvious. He was Arnodelo’s guy, which meant he executed his orders. Which meant Arnodelo ordered Marcus’s murder and was planning to get rid of her too. In fact, Bette thought, he had tried already. Now she was certain the bomb that had exploded in her car in Tijuana had been concealed by Bogan under Arnodelo’s order, not by Vicente Lebron’s cartel.
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Hi Valerie:
This is sad as you said, but it’s also a great story, Marcus has been murdered and his killers are dead, apparently, it was Arnodelo who planned his death and he may go after Bette and Shane.
What bothers me is that one of the killers said (before dying) that they had the protection of the cops, which for me it could mean that Arnodelo wants to show that Bette alone with her gang is the criminal head behind the drug trafficking, because, in that way, he will have a break from the police persecution, while Bette and the gang are murdered making appeared as it was a fight among gangsters.
Now, honestly, I think we have reached the point in which Bette and Shane have to make a decision, and I trust you, Valerie, that you will lead us, sooner or later, in this wonderful, and amazing rollercoaster-story to a happy end.
Thank you so much for this excellent and heartbreaking story, I will be waiting impatiently for the next chapter.
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I loveeeeee this dark story. Please update this soon.
Hey Valerie,
I am excited for the update, but i will read it in a few days. I need some happy and sweet and not sad and dark.
I truly enjoy your story and will follow it to the hopefully happy end.
Hey Valerie, i just read the chapter and boy you were right about warning us it was a sad one.
Especially the end where Tina took Bette in her arms and she finally broke down.
I still trust and hope that you stick to the title and that you will not let us and Bette fall.
It will be interesting to read how you are going to let Bette leave this mess and hopefully start a new life with Tina (and Shane) in Auckland. But that is my wish, maybe you have another end for this incredible story.
Thank you so much for for this incredible story!
I read the post 5 days ago and I’ve been contemplating about it since then. I definitely simpathize this Bette Porter, but I can’t decide for myself wether this is becouse it is still our Bette even if in a different incarnation, or because the circumstances of her life are so that we can’t help feeling pity for this woman. So what do you think, would we still like the main character if it were not Bette Porter ?