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If I Fall: Chapter 20
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The rest of the girls had all consented to another drink when suddenly Carmen looked around and noticed what Shane had been mulling over for the last ten minutes.
"Hey! Where’s Dana?" she asked of no one in particular.
Shane looked back at Carmen, and then to the rest of the group, where she was greeted by blank stares and shoulder shrugs.
"I think I saw her go outside before," Jenny offered, before finishing her drink with a loud slurping sound.
Shane nodded and motioned towards the door. "I’ll be right back."
"Wait," Bette stood up, giving a knowing look to Tina and directing her attention towards Shane. "Let me go. I think I can offer some advice on this one," she smiled assuredly at her and walked towards the main entrance.
When she finally pushed her way through the dense crowd and out into the still night air, the only faces she saw were the ones of random strangers puffing away on cigarettes. This seemed to be all that the area had to offer, until, out of the corner of her eye, she spotted a woman’s figure, appearing quite defeated and slightly hunched over as she leaned on a railing before her. Her head was down and she was turned away from the rest of the crowd, only allowing the back of her fragile frame to be seen.
"Dana?" Bette hesitantly asked, making her way over to the woman.
She immediately tensed up, standing upright and wiping the salt from her tear-stained cheeks. "Oh, hey Bette," she resolutely muttered as she turned to face her friend.
"Hey," Bette searched her eyes for a moment before continuing. "Dana, are you alright?"
"Me?" the athlete inquired with a forced smile. "Yeah I’m…," she trailed off, realizing how hopeless her lie sounded. She briefly closed her eyes in vain attempt to regain what little composure she had left, "No…I’m not."
"What is it?" Bette moved closer, placing a hand on her shoulder.
"You ever feel like your life is just headed in one giant downward spiral? And it’s like…no matter how far down you fall, you still seem to be slipping further and further away from everything you used to know."
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As promised, I have returned, so huzzah or some other such thing. To start with, I must have skipped over your disclaimer this morning…I read it and didn’t stop laughing for a good five minutes. Thinking about it now is making me giggle again. I’m glad I don’t have any roommates, or I’d be off to the loony bin for sure. As for the story…well, I hope you’re being serious about the angst letting up soon. Sure, I can be a drama whore in my story, but it’s usually only for a chapter or two. Alice needs to get over herself. I mean, yeah, protecting yourself is all well and good, but you only get so far in life by observing it going on around you. And Dana needs to prove herself with more than just words. (Sidenote…when they finally do reconcile, can it be on a tennis court? The tennis dresses make me drool). And I’ll be glad to take Jules off Al’s hands when she goes back to the love of her life. Oh, and I’m glad somebody agrees with me on the Mariah thing. The very idea makes me cringe, but I have a friend who swears up and down that she’s actually pretty good. Whatev. Okay, now that I’ve babbled your life away, I’ll leave this with a plea for you to post again soon. I still heart this story even though it makes me want to tear out my hair.
forget what muted said about the angst! we LOVE the angst… how can we have steamy, tension filled bathroom moments without angst? don’t hurry it- they’ve only just now started admitting the problem- that ought to be good for at least a few more chapters! : ) loved the scene with Bette too–“The unfamiliar feeling of optimism was a welcome change, and it was as if Bette’s words lifted up a bit of the burden she’d be carrying around lately.” very nice Swis. Post soon.
oh how i’ve waited for you, checking each day to see if you’ve posted and today my lord wat did i see your name…soo worth the wait wat a sad ending tho i love this story great work!!!!!
Nice Update, filled without alot of Danish angst, but we know what happens after Danish angst….Danish Lovin’
If I didn’t know how much you loved danish too, I’d be worried. :-) I must ask that you make us suffer at least a little while longer, but please throw us a bone once in a while. :-)
i love the angst. keep it coming. but i do see the light at the end of the tunnel.
Please update this story there are not enough dana and alice storys out there…… the story is great
am i first?? i’m never first for anything! anyway, i have to say this was a great chapter! i feel so bad for dana but she put herself in this position. can’t wait to see what happens next. post soon!
Okay, I need to rush to my dead end job so I just skimmed this over, but it looks more than good. I’ll read it when I get home tonight and leave a much better, or at least more well-thought-out, comment then. Yay, you posted right after me! We rule.
Yippee! Fresh Danish! Great chapter swismiss. I am looking forward to how the story continues to unfold…
So glad to see you updating this story. Feeling sorry for Dana but, yeah, she put herself in this position. Your writing is wonderfully easy to read and the whole story seems to flow so well – lovin’ it!
haha, way to call me out, cape! Nah, the angst is good. I do heart the tension, as long as it leads to good things. You’ve already promised it will, so carry on. :P
Oh I fvuking love this story :) it has been a long time since you posted but I’m sure we all remember the story as I do. Keep posting and post soon thx chick xx
wow. glad you’re back posting again :)
where u at swissmiss i miss you and this story so so much. u kno ur my favourite please come back soon :)