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If I Fall: Chapter 21a
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Flipping the phone’s top closed, she craned her neck upwards and yelled Alice’s name in the best hushed whisper she could summon. No answer. She quickly fumbled to open her phone up again and started to dial the writer’s cell, but abandoned that plan once she recalled that the phone was back to Alice’s apartment charging..
"Fuck!" Jules cursed herself.
"Jules darling, what’s wrong?" Jules whirled around at the sound of the familiar British voice, relieved to find Helena staring at her with concern.
"Oh, Helena! I’m so glad you’re here. Listen, I just got a call from work that there’s an emergency I have to go tend to. I was just trying to find Alice to tell her that I have to leave."
"Oh, well," Helena began, looking around in vain for her friend, "she has to be around here somewhere."
Nervously, Jules decided it’d be best not to tell Helena that Alice was upstairs in a bathroom that was supposed to be off limits. "Yeah, I know, look, she left her cell phone at home tonight because her battery was dead so I can’t exactly call her and let her know. And I really have to get over to my office right away. So would you mind finding her and explaining to her what happened? And please apologize for me."
Helena smiled reassuringly. "Sure darling, no problem. As soon as she turns up I’ll give her the message. You just go do what you have to do."
"Thanks, Helena." She gave the brunette a quick hug and made her way to the front door.
Helena stood there for a moment surveying the party in hopes of finding Alice until she felt a tap on her shoulder.
"Hey Helena." She turned around to find Dana standing before her with what looked like the brightest smile she could muster up painted on her face.
"Oh, hi Dana, I hope you’re enjoying yourself."
"Yep, totally." She didn’t like lying, but even more so she hated to sound anything less than gracious. But right now, the more pressing matter on her mind had nothing to do with having fun, but instead with having to pee. "Hey listen, I really have to use the bathroom and the line for the one down here is like, wrapped around the corner. I know upstairs is off limits, but you think I can just use it real quick and come right back down?
Helena glanced upstairs once before turning back to reply. "Well, I don’t see why not. Just be careful, okay? It’s truly a mess up there because it’s in the middle of being renovated. I’m not even sure if everything is in proper working order actually."
"Oh sure, no problem," Dana said gratefully. "I’ll be quick and I won’t disturb a thing, I promise."
"Dana, it’s fine, really. It’s all yours. But I do apologize for the appearance, it’s quite disastrous up there."
After one more quick smile, Dana darted for the stairs. Upon reaching the top, she noticed the bathroom door was slightly ajar and pushed it open without a second thought. It wasn’t until she was completely inside, however, that she quickly learned she was not alone. As she lifted her head, she discovered Alice, sitting atop the counter, skirt hiked up to the point where it was nearly off, dangling one leg over the edge while the other rested on the toilet seat. Dana was immediately frozen in place, eyes wide and fixed on the sight before her. A deer in headlights seemed more aware of its surroundings than she did, and as her mouth shot open while she thought desperately of something to say, she couldn’t avoid letting her eyes wander over Alice’s scantily clad body. And as she stood there gawking, she knew she had to say something soon to diffuse the awkwardness of the situation…and yet, she knew any attempt to form a coherent word was entirely out of the question.
"Well it’s about—," Alice began, not yet looking up to see that it was Dana, and not Jules standing there before her. But once she shot her head up, and saw Dana, she immediately felt all the color rush to her face and jumped off the countertop without a second-thought. "Dana!"
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Nice Cliffhanger, don’t wait too long to update! Bathrooms are Danish’s special place…Get it on Get it on
Okay you’ve gotta be kidding me with this “should I continue” crap. Seriously, if you don;t have them work it out and consummate the hell out of each other I’m gonna hunt you down. Not really but it sounded good in my head. You quit I quit, so there. Really though, I love this and I love the whole tension thing. You’re awesome so you better damn well continue!
Swissmiss24, of course I remember your story. As a matter of fact, I have been waiting for this update. A month ago, I mentioned you on ourchart.com/forums/fanfiction/”Danish Writers, Where Art Thou.” The story line is attractive with D pursuing A. You wrote a very determined D. For example, in this chapter, you wrote “And when Alice did get tired, Dana would be there, ready to try again.” And yes, the cat and mouse game, that is why Danish is intriguing. Back to this chapter having Harrison as D’s sounding board was fun. It reminded me of the 3 musketeers’ visiting B & T to solve the “soup chef” problem. I could picture D’s same expression in this conversation with Harrison. Oh, and about Alice exercising, only if the sun would rise from the west. A’s heart to heart talk with Harriet was great. At least it was a start for A to admit herself out loud her feelings for D. But stalking again, I am not sure I can handle a second round. I love a hot & dorky Dana. Cinderella & Prince Charming? Nice touch. OMG, what a fantastic cliffhanger ending. I don’t know how you can even consider not continuing this story. About a month ago, I started commenting on Danish stories. With this post, you gave me a chance to tell you how much joy I got reading your previous posts. MT put it the best and please listen to her. MT also writes so beautifully and we as readers could not afford to lose two major Danish writers who happen to be “La crème de la crème”. So, pps, I waited more than 2 months for this post and if I have to wait again, it will be fine with me. I do understand quality writing takes time. I would love to read how they work things out. Thank you very much.
Oh my god!! You can NOT leave it there!! Please continue with this story.
Just popped out to join in the begging comments. Pleeeease… don’t keep us in suspense any longer… And pleeeease, don’t even think of quitting it; it’s too good!! Dana being the drooling one… owww that’s priceless! I wish they had shown us some of this in the show. Fast forward to Julesless si vous plait; she doesn’t hold a candle to Dana…!! Plus, I can see a dark side on her. I don’t buy that social worker stuff… I think she has something up her sleeve… PleeeeasePS, I love it!
argh – i can’t believe you left it there. i hope you keep your promise and post soon. this update was really good. the interaction with harrison and dana was really cute. and you really do a great job of transitioning between scenes. i know you had to set up the run in, but i can’t believe jules just left alice in the bathroom – she couldn’t have ran upstairs and told her she was leaving. excellent story, post soon.
ps. please do not quit this story its to good, im gunna put it out there swissmiss.. i think its the best!! one lol theres heaps of great stories and how i love them all but yours oh man im in love with it ahaha i sound so stupid right now but thats the truth and im sure there are many that agree thats all :)
wow that was quick you totally answered my prayers lol neways wow eleven i was like out of breath when i realised you had posted then i saw how much and i got so excited lol geezus do you know how much i’ve missed this story but you fully made it up with this one and i can only imagine wats gunna happen in that bathroom or mybe i have dirty mind neways them two alone is always great :) very happy to see your back and on a regualr basis right loved it all of it :) great work!!!!
i love this story so much its great and i really hope you post again very soon (tonight maybe?lol) im so glad you decided to keep going with the story and you better not just leave it and stop!i love it so keep writing and posting lots!
Great update, swismiss! 21a implies a 21b coming along soon, right? Please?
I’m not much of a poster, Im usually dedicated to Muted’s danish only on here but about 2 months ago I decided to check around when I really needed a danish fix. I remember reading the last chapter posted and being like “oh shit this was like over a month ago, theres no way shes gonna post again!” yet today I decided to check anywaise and saw that you did, you have no idea how excited I was for some fresh danish and a solution to the last chapter. But I gotta say, your cruel for leaving this on such a cliff hanger. Pleeeeease post again and continue to do so. I depend on fanfic to keep my danish addiction satisfied, and your one of the best by far. I love this story! But especially I love Dana just because shes the hottest, funniest and most adorable character on the show. I love me some good danish in the mornings, so please post the rest in the next week. Im jonesing.
please don’t keep us hanging in here for long. hihihi I’ve been reading your story and I like it very much, just thought I’d leave a comment to let you know, thanks:)