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No Good Deed Goes Unpunished Chapter 11
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Daphne: It’s fine.
Alex: Now kiss and make up.
Alice raised her eyebrows considering the idea.
Daphne: Don’t even think about it!
All four laughed and finally settled into comfortable conversation.
Tina: Bette, you have to understand that I’m sorry. I really never meant to hurt you.
Bette: Well you did.
Tina turned away.
Tina: I know.
Bette let her body slide to the ground. She covered her face with her hands to shield her tears from view. Tina body dropped next to Bette’s reaching for her hands.
Tina: Don’t hide.
When Bette let her hands fall to her sides Tina let out a gasp. She couldn’t believe how broken Bette had become. She wrapped Bette tightly in her arms. At first Bette struggled to get free. She didn’t want to feel Tina anywhere on her, she didn’t want to remember the scent of her hair or the satin of her skin, But when she ran out of steam she tightened her grip on Tina, not wanting to let go.
Tina: I’m right here babe. I’m not going anywhere.
Bette continued to cry in Tina’s arms, unable to control her unrelenting sobs.
Tina rubbed Bette’s back hoping to soothe the woman she had hurt so much in the past.
Tina: I’m sorry Bette. I’m so ***** sorry.
When Bette had regained her strength, she let her eyes roam around the room. Remembering everything that had just happened. She couldn’t believe she had lost control the way she had. She let Tina see her vulnerable, after swearing it would never happen again. Bette jumped to her feet as Tina watched in shock again.
Tina: Bette, where are you going?
Bette: I can’t be near you right now.
Bette gave Tina one last look before running down the steps and out the door. She needed to get away, as far away from Tina as she could.
When Tina finally realized Bette wasn’t coming back she took a deep breath and stood up. She headed back up the stairs and into the audition room, defeated.
Alex: Well?
Alice: What happened?
Tina just put her hand up. She was at a loss for words.
Alex: Where did she go?
Alice: Tina! Say something, you’re killing us!
Tina: She broke down and cried in my arms.
Alice: *****, this is not good.
Alex: Oh god…
Silence filled the room, no one dared to speak.
Tina: Alex, call Bette. The part is hers if she truly wants it.
Daphne: What?
Tina: You’re her understudy.
Daphne: Oh I don’t do understudies.
Tina: Then don’t take it.
The truth was the Daphne was happy Bette had gotten the role. She was just afraid to tell Jackie. Daphne looked at Tina hoping she would change her mind. She didn’t.
Daphne: Fine, I’ll take it.
Melanie: And me?
Tina: You’re playing Christina.
Melanie grabbed Tina in a tight embrace.
Melanie: Thank you so much! You won’t regret this, I swear!
Melanie grabbed her backpack and ran out the door, only to return one minute later.
All eyes turned back on the young actress.
Melanie: When do we start rehearsals?
Alex: Monday. I’ll call with more information.
Melanie: Ok, great. I’m so excited! Thank you again.
Tina: You’re welcome, you deserved it.
Melanie finally left with Daphne close behind.
Alex stood next to Tina. He noticed the look on her face.
Alex: Tell me what’s going on up there.
He pointed to her head.
Tina looked as if she was hypnotized.
Tina: I just remembered how amazing it felt to have her in my arms.
TBC…
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Excellent as always. Sad too. Love it.
Damn girl the worst thing about going away is that I will miss this story. The good thing is that it will all be here for me to catch up on when I get back.. Thanks so much for this I really needed that little hug with the two of them at least feeling for a few mere moments. You are a tease. Thanks
damn flair excellent continue soon!
Bravo! Bravo! Bravo!
Author, author!!!!
Three curtain calls, in short order!
I am right there in that theatre with them. Thank you for not being afraid to make Bette vulnerable, destroyed by the loss. All the better to come back from, glorious and victorious! I love that Tina will be (I hope) providing the vehicle for Bette’s comeback! The work they do together will be a solid foundation that their relationship previously lacked on the first go-round!!!!
And please, don’t let Tina become Arthur Miller to Bette’s Marilyn (After The Fall). Bette is, after all, Tina’s muse. Writers sometimes despise that which inspires them, the deep relationship with their creativity.
I Love This Story!!!!
alright, i’m officially saying that i feel more sympathy for bette than tina. i know they both got hurt, but bette was smashed into a thousand pieces that were buried in desert sand. i think that this sequel has has more drama in it’s 11 chapters than anything in can’t help falling in love. i think it seems that way because earlier they had bumps but were still together. they had alex and alice which provided some of the greatest comedy written. without those two things i’m feelin the pain! and it’s fantastic. plz post again today if you can. broken bette’s monologue is written beautifully by the way.
Aww Flair..lm your reading bitch right now! I can’t get enough of this story.. I can picture it all in my head perfectly!! Just to have them in the same room makes my heart beat faster..x
amazing!!!!!! your killing me!!!!!!!
Im yelling, (do you hear me all the way there). finally they are in the same place for a few moments. tina really needs to figure out how to be repentent. i knew she didnt mean to hurt her, but sheesh, she did change/come out to show her love. alice/alex. glad they are there to support. my knees are damn sore, girl. but please another one if you can.
Ahhh this is soo heartwrenching and I seriously can’t get enough. Was it fortunate for Tina to be able to hold Bette in her arms again? Will Bette accept the role as herself? I can’t wait to find out. Thanks, flair!!
Tina has to run after Bette and beg for forgivness, she needs to fight and fight hard for the love of her life. Maybe that’s what Bette wants, Tina not giving up and willing to do what is neccesary to get her back and prove to her that she will never let her go or hurt her like that again. Love your story Flair.
this was excellent again! everytime i read it i wonder why tina broke up with bette in ur previous story. anyways, i guess the question here is not why it happened but how to move on from there? awaiting ur next installment:)
TRUST Ido believe that will be the key to all of this. Bette started this by breaking up with Tina on voice Mail, then Tina rejected Bette in arizone, Do they and will they trust eachother again, Can each one regain that trust. Love can be the desiding factor, Thanks for a beautiful chapter.
Please post as fast as possible.. Please. Great chapter. Really great.
it’s so real that sometimes I’m afraid to read further… esp. when I’m finding almost my own words/thoughts in it… you are a great writer!
God..I love you and your story
she’ll come around. she’ll come around.
Thank you again for your beautiful writing, I truly love this story. I am eagerly awaiting you next post! Best wishes from a ‘Nederlander’ (which means dutch (wo-)man)
That was powerful. It’s like I could feel Bette’s pain. That was beautifully written. Time for me to go check out the next chapter- hopefully Tina is going to start really fighting for Bette
Well done, please do it again.
that’s right. amazing.
i love this story
I LOVE IT LOVE LOVE LOVE IT Please post soon!!!!!!
OK I thought they back each other OMG! this is more intense it’s killingg ME LOL! How long they going civil to each other come on give them a brick Oh My flair Thanks.
Your flair for the dramatic strikes again. I’m glad Bette got the part and I was hoping when she was asked who has going to play Tina, she would have said herself.
I’m hoping she changes her mind and make Melanie HER understudy. Who else better to play the part of Bette and Tina than Bette and Tina!
Post again soon.
wow…too good to be true..
OMFG!!! That was amazing. I loved it. You know, I know Bette’s pain personally and in her “adution” I was moved to tears. I didnt even get teary with when they broke up, but that was excellent. Are you yourself an actress?? Damn that was so good. I hope Bette gets better, if not with Tina then just overall happy, they both deserve at least that. Pleae post soon.
Can Bette ever trust Tina again?….Bette playing herself in the play and the 2 of them working that closely together? lots of anger to get passed….and lots of sparks to get FLYING! YAY! Love the story as always.
this is good stuff …. no, great………..bravo
i am fucking spechless..that was amazing Tina dont live in regret if she wants Bette again then fight for her but only if she knows for sure what she wants otherwise step of bitch ok im sorry for call Tina bitch but we all can feel how devastated Bette was and is and this is not right play with her heart..ok..fucking amazing please stop my misery..lol.LOVE IT as always your ROCK!!!!
Tina… i can imagine how amazing it was!
Flair… great job again darling… my heart is broken!
Damn this is amazing and awesome. Post soon, thanks!
Could this get any better??
Now i know what do u love this story, cuz it’s SO REAL, SO DRAMATIC, SO PASSIONATE..
Wow, my heart was pounding that entire time!! Wouldn’t be nice to have someone think of you the way bette thinks of tina! Ahh i love fan fiction!
oh man all that drama ,but like I said before, I’m addicted to your story, so give me more, soon please!
WOW!…This was just so, so, so, so, so, so rich!!! One second I’m LMFAO at Bette’s sarcastic quip: “I’m pretty sure I know the lines…”, then the next second I’m blown back in my chair watching bug-eyed as she releases her caustic catharsis. Excellently executed tirade, by the way. Certainly had my rapt attention. Don’t know what else to say right now…except I see a potent storm brewing on the horizon! Better put the top up…the loan hasn’t come through yet on the Hummer. Anxious for more, Flair.
They say that hind sight is 20/20, so I guess it may be cleansing for Bette to revisit their relationship via the play. It should help her heal and in healing she should be better able to go forward…with or without Tina.
What could I say to you, dangerous temptress who never stops to seduce your audience/readers with such an endless rollercoaster ??
A new chapter, a new jewel. Each time you succeed the same miracle !
And here, once more, you show us the range of your gift for changing tones : when drama reaches a summit point, here’s come back the comedy. Tears, sighs, laughs, sighs again… Do you really want to emotionally destroy us, dearest tormenter ? (lol) Well, well, I think we – your beloved readers ! – all will slowly disappear one after one, deadly strinked in our hearts, like Christie’s Ten Little Indians… and finally there will be nobody to post any comment ! Aaaah, now that would be your worst nightmare, hmmm ? (… thanks for that, Alice !)
Speaking about Alice… god, she was great facing this insufferable Daphne, I was all applauses in my seat far behind ! “I am your worst nightmare”… yeah, go !!
Now, tell me, I bet you met a lot of sweet naïve Melanie and irritating Daphne in your artistic life, didn’t you ? Between Stanislavsky and Eve Arrington’s methods, hmm ?
(Well, perhaps your Daphne isn’t such a bad girl, after all… wait and see ! And I like very much this gentle little Melanie, there’s something both funny and touching about her.)
Yesterday, you made me painfully relate to Tina’s test and today, it was like if I shared Bette’s breaking down… Only the best authors are able to do that to their readers. That’s for you – and you know I mean it.
Finally, last but not least : your last line just got me… That’s pure romantic drama’s essence ! I melt once more – …surprise ? Of course not !
Now you learned to us that “everything in New York is by yelling”, I’ll use this method with you to beg an other chapter : PLEEEEEAAAASE !!!!! (… is it yelling enough ??)
I am SO hooked on this story! You’re doing a wonderful job letting it unfold. Keep it going! I’m loving every word of it!
well this should be interesting…i give about two rehearsals before they are all over each other! YIPEE!!
Hurry, I need another fix. I love what you’ve done so far. I can’t wait to see I Bette takes the part. Hury, please.
Flair,Flair,Flair. I think you actually almost rendered me speechless. I just had to take a peek to see if you had posted before I try to do some work. Now I’ll be anticipating your next update all day. You just keep getting better and better. “I think I know the lines”. Lets hope Bette takes the part, then ooooooooooooooooooooh I can’t wait. Fantastic as usual, please post again before end of day.