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Si me ves, o no
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Criminal
Chapter 5. Si me ves, o no
It had been a troublesome night, for both of them. Bette was frowning constantly because something didn’t feel right about this mission and she couldn’t put her finger on it. Additionally, she was worried for Tina. It had been a hard day, emotional and traumatic. She wanted to make sure everything would be just fine and that their time together was not just some spur of the moment thing after a life-threatening shock. She was actually regretting it a little bit. She pressured her, when it supposed to be taken slowly.
Then, she looked over to the bed, the cascading moonlight bounced upon Tina’s golden threads and added a pale hue to the color. It was almost like a quaint and fine recede drawing from the Renaissance. Then as the night evolved into daytime, the moon was replaced by the sun, the light changed, and the painting changed all together. Now it was golden, reddish, and bright, absolutely bright. She knew the blonde was awake, but she did not want to disturb the peaceful silence they had between them. It gave her time to think, and to relive the moments she was with her. And if that was what she would ever have, she wanted to hold on to it.
Tina slept very little throughout the night, mostly listening to her own heartbeat. She already missed the strong embrace of the brunette woman. But in the dark, she closed her eyes and could feel Bette’s presence. Sometimes the brunette stirred in the sofa, sometimes she paced in the room, and sometimes she even did groups of push-ups. It did not bother her at all. Her presence kept her safe.
The light finally intruded and disturbed her. She tossed in bed and rubbed her eyes. She saw Bette sit up straight in the couch, and gave her a languid, loving smile. The light poured into those dark eyes and warmed them up, softened the rigid lines on her face, while the shadows emphasized her long lashes and the flawless facial structure. “Good morning.”
“Morning.” The brunette stood up and took her time wandering over. When she finally reached her bedside, she kept a respectful distance, but couldn’t help her fingers twirling a strand of straying blonde hair she found on Tina’s shoulder. “It’s only seven thirty. You can sleep more.” At last, she failed to resist the temptation, and imprinted a kiss on the rosy lips before her.
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First thing first, SO to the lovely ladies reading and commenting!
Simonem, yep I changed quite a few things here and there, hope you find my pace comfortable.
doc, bibi, lipitora, SG, wkm, thanks for stopping by, ladies. I do my best to not disappoint!
lakeeskin Awww thanks so much for stepping up as a rep of the silent readers. Lots of love to you!
TN1, you know how much I love you… too much to be spoken, so I gift you my story instead :)
doris, mscully, Lishalove, thanks guys! Stop by anytime and lots of love to you as well!
Ahh I know you expect longer chapters. But this just seems like a right place to stop. I’ll let you guys imagine what happens to that bastard Henry for a while.
As for the poem in the chapter, I did the translation, my apologies in advance to any Spanish speaking readers, I know very little about poems or Spanish for that matter…
But the original version, in Chinese mind if I add, was absolutely breathtaking and heartbreaking. It’s the sixth Dalai Lama’s love poem “To see or not to see”, also changed it a bit coz I can’t remember the exact words.
Ok, now back to work, hopefully I’ll post another very soon.
Peace :)
Really liked the poem. So Henry is going to trap himself. Hope Bette and Tina are smarter than Jorge. Loved it, thanks
This chapter is the falling in love chapter. We. Know Bette loves Tina… She always has. Tina cares deeply for Bette and she is trying to understand why. This chapter had all of the elements of two people falling… The push, the pull, give and take, desire and will to protect and support. That’s the story but the way YOU wrote it is just as harmonious for us. We fall in love too… with the characters, the story, and the author. You are doing to us what Bette and Tina are doing to each other… A little give, a little mystery, wanting, hoping, etc. I love that you ended this chapter at this point. As any new lover I want to wonder about “what’s next” and I want to be comforted in my knowledge that I will be taken care of. Still loving this story.
Nice, sweet, and entertaining chapter. I loved it!
Wonderful update, keeps you interested.
Jorge is a very smart man and Henry seems to meet his destination.
Pps.
I really liked this chapter.
You’re very talented, but I have repeatedly told you. :)
I really enjoy the way you weave in mysterious fibers in this story. I liked it in the end you’re left temporarily in our imagination, what will happen.
I’m so glad that Tina was so smart to find a suspicious situation. and Bette and her, so no one was hurt in the end.
I hope they will eventually figure out how to go beyond Jorge brains.
It was a great chapter. I’m looking forward to the next one!
yeah,I like what you have done,but next time please mark it with NC-17,I want to be well prepared,you know what I mean!
The poem was beautiful just like this progressing story. Thankful for your imagination and talent to put it in writing!!
Different and interesting story. I worry though about them all the while I’m reading!
Love every chapter! Can’t wait too see how things go between Bette, Tina and the mob. Oh, and no need to solve this quickly, the longer the story, the better for us! ;)
Hmmm now i am worried about Tina cause if Henry is going to die he may give up info about her Then what would Tibette do !!!
Loved the chapter, I hope Bette is smart enough to get out of this situation by giving up evidence and helping Tina get the bad guys. PPS
Beautiful and wonderful poem, I love poems.
Bette lovely dedicated so much love Tina,
and I’m still concerned about the fact
Bette really be a criminal.
10 Stars.
go to the next chapter.