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Si me ves, o no
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“And I hope you’d want me to be safe too.” Bette whispered against her forehead and kissed her again. Then she changed into her working suit, grabbed car keys, and started to walk out.
“Wait, Bette!” Tina ran to the door.
Bette stopped, but blocked the woman from escaping. “Yes, T?”
Standing on her toes, Tina kissed the brunette, deeply, with force, because she knew what this meant, it meant goodbye.
“Aww is that a good luck kiss for me?” It was kind of corny, like they had been married for a long time and Tina was seeing her off to go to work, an old couple they seemed. But Bette thoroughly enjoyed it. Maybe it was still early to say something, but she knew she loved Tina, she always loved Tina. “Bye.” She stepped out of the room, no matter how much she resented it, and locked the door behind her.
Tina sighed deeply, and tried several times on the door handle. It was really locked. So she ran to the window and looked as the brunette drove out from the front gate. Then she saw Henry, driving his car to another direction, followed by Tito, who took the side gate and disappeared from her sight. Diego, also came out from the house and went to his car. It was quite bizarre, she thought back to the conversation with Jorge. He said most of the people would be going together to the Hutchinson pier, but people were already leaving. She quickly fumbled in the nightstand and found some paper clips. Though she had never had to pick a lock, she knew how after catching several thieves and burglars.
“Oh damn it!” After breaking most of the clips, she sat against the door and cursed. Looking up at the clock tick and tock, indicating the lack of time, she decided to give it another try. The clip went into the key hole, and there appeared some clicking noise between medals. She turned her wrist and heard a louder click. “Oh my god! Oh my god I got it!” She quickly calmed herself down, persuading herself it was just the first step and stop acting like a rookie. Then she shook her head. She was a rookie, a bold but sloppy one.
It was already nine twenty, she had to find a phone and call lieutenant Kroll about the big deal that was about to take place. When she stumbled down the stairs, trying to get to the kitchen phone, she saw Jorge sitting in the kitchen, reading some magazine and slowly stirring his bowl of cereal. Did she just see the time wrong? No it was about nine thirty. But what business would he be doing in his kitchen?
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First thing first, SO to the lovely ladies reading and commenting!
Simonem, yep I changed quite a few things here and there, hope you find my pace comfortable.
doc, bibi, lipitora, SG, wkm, thanks for stopping by, ladies. I do my best to not disappoint!
lakeeskin Awww thanks so much for stepping up as a rep of the silent readers. Lots of love to you!
TN1, you know how much I love you… too much to be spoken, so I gift you my story instead :)
doris, mscully, Lishalove, thanks guys! Stop by anytime and lots of love to you as well!
Ahh I know you expect longer chapters. But this just seems like a right place to stop. I’ll let you guys imagine what happens to that bastard Henry for a while.
As for the poem in the chapter, I did the translation, my apologies in advance to any Spanish speaking readers, I know very little about poems or Spanish for that matter…
But the original version, in Chinese mind if I add, was absolutely breathtaking and heartbreaking. It’s the sixth Dalai Lama’s love poem “To see or not to see”, also changed it a bit coz I can’t remember the exact words.
Ok, now back to work, hopefully I’ll post another very soon.
Peace :)
Really liked the poem. So Henry is going to trap himself. Hope Bette and Tina are smarter than Jorge. Loved it, thanks
This chapter is the falling in love chapter. We. Know Bette loves Tina… She always has. Tina cares deeply for Bette and she is trying to understand why. This chapter had all of the elements of two people falling… The push, the pull, give and take, desire and will to protect and support. That’s the story but the way YOU wrote it is just as harmonious for us. We fall in love too… with the characters, the story, and the author. You are doing to us what Bette and Tina are doing to each other… A little give, a little mystery, wanting, hoping, etc. I love that you ended this chapter at this point. As any new lover I want to wonder about “what’s next” and I want to be comforted in my knowledge that I will be taken care of. Still loving this story.
Nice, sweet, and entertaining chapter. I loved it!
Wonderful update, keeps you interested.
Jorge is a very smart man and Henry seems to meet his destination.
Pps.
I really liked this chapter.
You’re very talented, but I have repeatedly told you. :)
I really enjoy the way you weave in mysterious fibers in this story. I liked it in the end you’re left temporarily in our imagination, what will happen.
I’m so glad that Tina was so smart to find a suspicious situation. and Bette and her, so no one was hurt in the end.
I hope they will eventually figure out how to go beyond Jorge brains.
It was a great chapter. I’m looking forward to the next one!
yeah,I like what you have done,but next time please mark it with NC-17,I want to be well prepared,you know what I mean!
The poem was beautiful just like this progressing story. Thankful for your imagination and talent to put it in writing!!
Different and interesting story. I worry though about them all the while I’m reading!
Love every chapter! Can’t wait too see how things go between Bette, Tina and the mob. Oh, and no need to solve this quickly, the longer the story, the better for us! ;)
Hmmm now i am worried about Tina cause if Henry is going to die he may give up info about her Then what would Tibette do !!!
Loved the chapter, I hope Bette is smart enough to get out of this situation by giving up evidence and helping Tina get the bad guys. PPS
Beautiful and wonderful poem, I love poems.
Bette lovely dedicated so much love Tina,
and I’m still concerned about the fact
Bette really be a criminal.
10 Stars.
go to the next chapter.