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The Fast and Fevered Fall – Chapter One
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She focused her attention back on her glass, draining the liquid in one easy motion. God, that felt good. Another further step away from life as she currently understood it to be. She signals to the woman behind the bar. She’s ready for another, and another if time will allow. It’s getting late but the clock doesn’t matter when your measuring time by now many drinks you can squeeze in before last call. She thought about what would get her to leave early. Not the fact that she has work in the morning, not the fact that really she’s too old to be out this late, drinking alone. Maybe a woman, a younger woman, who didn’t ask too many questions. The bartender approaches her, weighing up the situation.
“Are you sure that you need another drink right now?” she asks, the smallest trace of concern in her voice.
“You won’t increase your profits if you talk people out of buying the merchandise.” came the reply.
“How many times have you been in here this week?”
“I don’t know, maybe once or twice. Why? Are you keeping count?”
“I’m just trying to look out for you.”
“I don’t need to be looked out for, all I need is another drink and if you would be so kind as to deliver it….”
“Like I said, another drink won’t solve the problem.”
“Maybe not, but it will stop me thinking about it.”
“You never stop thinking about it.” laughed the bartender.
“Tell me why we have these conversations.”
“Because I’m the one person that you talk to. Because you might think that I judge you but you never have to face me in the morning.”
“Maybe that’s something that should change.”
“Which part?”
“My not seeing you in the morning.”
“Nice try, but do you not think that I’ve heard all the chat up lines that have ever been uttered?”
“You might have, but you’ve never heard them from me.” said the blonde, letting out a throaty laugh.
“You’re drunk.”
“That might be true but you have to admit there’s something attractive in that, something dangerous, something that you want to get to know better.”
“Dangerous, maybe…”
“You think you can rescue me.”
“You think you’re past rescuing.” challenged the bartender.
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Oh, I can tell this is going to be a good one. Tina as a lost, heavy drinker? I can certainly see that happening. Great start.
Tragic, dark, bleak… love it.
Even if the marriage was with someone else and not Henry, it’s something I haven’t read, good job girl!
Wow, Tina was pretty dispicable and she seems to have come to a full realization of that. It seems a case of reaping what we sow. We all fuck up, we all at some time or other behave less than admirably. But Tina, seems to have gotten stuck in berating herself as she had gotten stuck in punishing Bette. Unless this is a stage she must go through before she can work on correcting her faults, this is not the path to enlightenment.
Slurp! You’ve got me – I’ve swallowed the hook, line and sinker with this first chapter of yours…your writing is so smooth…excellently written and very dramatic. You can reach out and touch the angst in Tina. She is lost in a very dark world right now. The bartender is a very brave soul indeed! Maybe the bartender can shed some light into Tina’s darkness. More please!
Yay another Fic CG. You always make me happy and your fics are the best. My girl Tina in this state is painful to read,but life is full of loss and tragedy, and her state of mind is not healthy. It saddens me,but I hope she works hards to get her life together. My guess is that her virtual divorce is Tibette, and the real one is with henry. Well i love the start. So u MUST Continue my lady.
what a fabulous start…i guessed it was tina…is bette the bartebder? or bette is the ex-lover? so many questions, can’t wait to read more to get answers
aaaaaaawwwwwwww hell Tina a slush!!!that’s hard to take…I’ll be back for the next instalment as painful as it is to see Tina in this rough state…
Seems like Tina has fallen on some hard times. I can guess that the one true love of her life was/is Bette. Is there any chance of Bette riding in on her white horse to help rebuild Tina into the loving woman she once was?
Hi citygirl, you have my full attention!!!! these are the words that made it for me “Two divorces, one virtual, one real. The virtual one hurt more than the real one.” I have so many questions i guess i will have to wait and read like everybody else, i look forward to the next 100 chapters!!!!
Wow…so many questions…where’s Angelica? Where’s Bette? Where’s the girls? Wiil Tina come back from this? How did it get this bad? Where do babies come from? Why is the sky blue? lol…okay I got carried away…but you know you have alot of questions to answer…so keep posting.
I agree this is a very WOW beginning – and full of questions about what brought Tina to this point? and who is our mysterious bartender going to be? This is great and I’m waiting for more just like all the other fans.
This is interesting and let see whats next, thanks!
wow… there is something about this story..,i don’t know… wow… please continue…soon
Wow! that’s all i can say… Please post soon, can’t wait for another chapter.
damn woman am hooked…..WHERE IS THE NEXT CHAPPY???? am like a dog without it’s bone right now.
You are a sneak, having yet another story up your sleeve! I popped on at work and saw your name, couldn’t wait until I got home to read! Great start, and very interested to see where it goes, I had the feeling from the beginning it would be Tina, and how right you are – A fevered and fast fall – very much looking forward to the who, how, why, what’s of the story!
that’s what i said frozenvita.. WOW!
I am intrigued and looking forward to the next chapter.
Different and intriguing beginning. PPS.
Am I the only one that is slightly thrilled Tina is in this state? Great start! I can’t wait to see where this goes! Post soon!
wow…
I haven’t read anything with such sexual tension, yet drenched in sadness since “A Night in the D” by luvrgirl. This is the kind of story I’ve been waiting to read for quite some time. I tried putting anyone in the characters’ shoes but I kept seeing and hearing Tina and Bette. Then I thought maybe Helena or even Shane could be the bartender. I’m definitely waiting for the next chapter!
i like it. and just because you promised it will be worth the wait, i’ll keep on reading :)
Wow, you def have my attention, and I will go with your comments about it “will be better”…pls cause this seems and feels very painful at the moment…tks for this new journey…tibette forever…
Looking forward to reading more, you have got my attention. Thank you
citygirl…you are something else. I sure hope you post again soon. I sure can’t wait to see where it goes.
Wow…wonderfully sad, tragic start…that totally hooked me. Thank you!
Wowee wow! Another captivating story, City! You are amazing. Can’t wait for the next chapter…
Interesting, especially since I’ve never picture Tina in a bar trying to drink away her problems. Where’s Angelica, is this before, after, keep going.
you’ve got me hooked- that’s for sure!
WOW!!! keep it going please. Thank you PPS
Okay I´m hooked. Eager to know why, how, when, who . . . Do continue and please soon.