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The Shipwreck
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But this time it was different, I could see it in Bette’s eyes. She really liked my presence, and I loved hers. Something had happened and I had to figure out what.
The next day I waited for my dad and the group to leave for their daily journey, and packed some stuff to go look for her. During the night I silently crept into my father’s tent and tried to copy all the paths he had drawn so far. Now I had a good map to follow if I got lost. I decided to go to the temple, who knew maybe she decided to show up, but nothing. I made my way through the woods. It was amazing. There were oodles of colorful plants and fruits all around. I could sense their flavors and scent. The sounds of the trees and the chant of the birds kept me company. But the noise of my thoughts was so noisy sometimes I couldn’t make out any sound around me. I moved carefully, not wanting to wake some beast hidden somewhere. I walked and I walked when, suddenly, I noticed someone lying on the ground. It was her!
“Bette!” I ran toward her unconscious body. “Bette!”
I shook her trying to wake her up. I could see bruises all over her body and face. “Please, Bette, wake up!”
I hurried to the river next to us and took some water. I splashed it on her face. She groaned and frowned. She was waking up.
“Hurt” she whispered.
“Here you are” I cooed.
“Hurt” she kept saying.
“Where?” I tried to find a wound. “Where does it hurt?”
She didn’t respond. She came to a sitting position, instead, and looked at me.
“What happened?” I asked.
“Fell”
“You fell? From where”
She winced, all her body must have been aching. Then she pointed at a tree. “There”
“Oh, you fell from a tree?”
“Yes”
She looked ashamed and I couldn’t help the smile. “Oh, poor thing”
She tried to stand up, but failed. “Oww”
“No, no” I stopped her. “Don’t, just lay there for a moment” I spoke gesticulating, making my words more understandable. “Why were you on that tree?”
“Home. Go home” she ignored again my question.
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Thank you for the new part!
Tina, you are not lost – you always can return to Bette in her cave and stay with her. I think she wouldn’t mind)
Hi Bette0Porter,
You are spoiling us with those chapters in short time! Keep them coming.
Tina lost, no please turn straight back to Bette!!!
So they are already a few months on the island and Tina was able to hold Bette a secret all those months. But she will leave soon now the ship is repaired and leave Bette behind 😟 What will happen?
I still wonder about Bette and how she seems to be the only one living on the island? How did she get the furniture,? Is it washed up on the beach?
I hope you will explain soon what Bette’s story is!
So many questions to answer my dear Bette0Porter! Maybe a new chapter tomorrow?
Thank you so much for the regularly post!
Hey Bette0Porter:
Great chapter, so, Bette has the commodities of the civilized world; and she knows how to use them, I see several possibilities, but I rather wait till you tell us what happened with her.
I think it’s unanimous, we all want Tina passes the night in Bette’s cave, I think even Bette wants that.
But, my concern is the bunch of losers, they will come looking for her and may discover Bette.
Thanks for this wonderful chapter, and pps.
P
I think Bette not telling the truth – what she’s doing on the tree? And she can’t just lie unconscious for two days until Tina found her. So what she’s doing?
Thank you and waiting for update!
P.S I also think that Tina could spend the night with Bette.
Great Story!
So many questions!
So looking forward to your answers!
Coping with the short Chapters while you post daily:-)
Thanks for posting
SG
hola me encanta esta historia y ya me tienes entretenida esperando que subas el otro gracias
Tina is obviously not thinking or very young and immature. She finds Bette unconscienous from a fall from a tree. She has been on the ground for two days? I think the story said a week? She appears to be able to walk, but if she has been out for any period of time, she needs water immediately. A splash on the face to revitize her is insufficent, after all they are in a tropical climate exposed to the changing temperatures of the day and night, lying on the ground for many hours.. She proabobly needs water and food. Tina should at least stay with her until she is certain that there are no residual serious injuries – head trama or internal injuries. Since Bette is living alone, Tina is the only candidate to provide her care until she is certain Bette can provide for herself. Is there water and food in the cave? How does Bette provide herself with food? Tina realizing that night has come, is far more anixious to keep her secret friendship and adventures, than Bette’s well being. Yes, she has treated the superfiscal flesh wounds but she has given no consideration to whether Bette is in a position to take care of her own needs once she leaves the cave. If Tina’s motivation is to keep Bette safe, then she has missed the potential problems that Bette’s situation may have. I was surprised that Tina considered leaving the cave at all until she was satisfied that Bette has what she needs to recover from this fall.
This is an excellent story and I am enjoying it immensely. I see many possiblities for the continuation of this story but I will let the author determine that path. Keep up the good work…hope to see another chapter soon.