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Closure – Chapter 9
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Alice waited until she heard the soft, even breathing of her girlfriend. She carefully got out of bed — trying to make a few movements as possible. This was due as much to not wanting to wake up Jackie as it was to the pain that Alice was in.
She grabbed some sweats out of her drawer in the bedroom. The clothes she had worn to the party were rags now. She slipped out of the bedroom and quietly closed the door behind her.
Alice made her way slowly to the powder room and looked at her face. No marks. Jackie was careful about that since the black eye.
It didn’t happen often. It was almost infrequent enough that Alice had deluded herself into thinking each time that maybe that was the last time.
How had she gotten herself into this mess? She is educated. She is worldly. She heard stories of people in abusive relationships and couldn’t understand how someone could allow themselves to end up in one. She wished she had known better and left the first time Jackie hurt her. It happened so slowly. The first time was shortly after they started dating.
Things between them were going really well and Alice even gave Jackie a copy of her apartment key. Alice had arrived at her apartment late one evening due to an editorial meeting that ran long. She found Jackie sitting on the sofa. Her initial excitement over seeing her new girlfriend was tempered by the look on Jackie’s face.
“What a nice surprise.” Alice said tentatively.
Jackie stood up and stalked over to Alice. “Where were you?”
“Pardon” Alice asked, genuinely confused.
“Where were you? We had plans to meet 30 minutes ago.”
“Oh, Jackie. I’m sorry. I got caught up in a meeting. We can head out to dinner now, though. Just let me put this stuff away.” She turned away from Jackie and walked over to the desk.
“Don’t walk away from me when I’m talking to you.” Jackie said softly. Then she grabbed Alice’s arm in a vise-like grip and roughly turned her around. Alice cried out in pain and surprise. That seemed to snap Jackie out of her trance.
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WOW u are a very good writer!!!!! U got me hooked!!! Again very good chapter,pls let Dana kick Jackies ass PLEASE!!!! This chapter brought tears to my eyes,please,please continue!!! PPS
I wanna know who is going take care of jackie??? i’m so gald dana found alice, now let dana nurse alice back to health!great update!
Sorry when it comes to Al. I’m pretty straight up. Dana should just beat the shit out of jackie “Sorry accident.” And have like bette as a back up story. who would believe that little gay lezzie tennis star and a highly educated art titan would have gaul to beat someone up. I love you magoose. Great story great chapter
Poor Alice. No person should ever have to go through that. Dana needs to find Jackie and beat the bitch down!! After she takes care of Alice of course. This is really good. Can’t wait to see what Jackie does when she finds Alice gone. Post soon.
I am with HF. Have D bring her tennis racket and go for J’s head. It would take A a long long … time to get back to her old self. I can’t believe all the previous incidents actually happened. That was appalling. Thank you for letting A gather her strength and leave J this time. She should go to the police and file a lawsuit. God knows A will need the money for the many years of psychotherapy to come. The worst really is the emotional scar. Hopefully D would have the patience to take care of A and not run away this time. I am really looking forward to the next update. Thank you.
I’m with HD. Make some use for the racket and whack Dana! Alice definitely deserves more than this. I hope you’ll play this up more, i’s very interesting. thanks for updating Magoose, like you also go me hooked;D
Wow great chapter when Dana finds out what really happened to Al the rest of the girls are going to have to hold her back so she doesn’t kill that b***h Jackie. PPS
The best place to go is to the police. Let them take this from there. I know the gang will be with Alice, If I was Jackie I would stay away from them thanks
It is NEVER okay to beat up a woman. I don’t care if she’s with another person or if you think she’s the meanest person in the world. But this? Jackie deserves everything she gets knocked back at her with the rage of the storm! I have gone from nervous to worry and now…..ANGER. I hope they all gang up on Jackie and introduce her to a real fight at the hands of, in this order, Shane, Kit, Jenny, Carmen, Tina, Bette, Dana, and finally Alice. And to finish it up, have Alice say ‘By the way, we’re through…bitch!’ and have her kick Jackie in the ribs when she’s down.
ofcourse i love this story its a great story..wow i was surprised at the amount of hurt jackie has caused alice physically i mean im glad though shes seen the light fianlly, i hope u write a scene where dana and jackie fight and jackie gets her ass kicked that’d be so so good yay for danish!!
great post! poor alice but i’m glad dana found her.. pms
This story is absolutely wonderful! Im totally hooked! Please repost soon, hopefully Dana gives jackie a piece of her mind!
3 hours later, some scenes are still playing in my head. So I got out of bed to comment more. “The clothes she had worn to the party were rags now”; “The bruise to her ribs”; “Blackeye and bloody nose”; “caused her back to shoot pain up and down.” J must have whipped A severely. This just made me sick. MaGoose, I needed to hand it to you. You really got to me this round. You have done a fantastic job summarizing the past abuse. Portraying J as a very smart and violent abusers and her behavior, such as “usually slept very deeply after, well, after” was so spot on. I guess I am really taking this particular story to heart. It is too damn real. While you are at it, please let D bring A to the hospital and make sure that she did not get an infection. Salute, MaGoose. Hope I don’t get any nightmares tonight.