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Closure – Chapter 9
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“Allie. God, I am so sorry.” Her demeanor had completely changed and she became the caring woman that she had shown Alice so far. “I don’t know my own strength some times.”
Alice eyed her warily. Jackie continued “I had a horrible day and I so look forward to seeing you that it really hurt to think you forgot about our date. I should be more careful. I am so sorry. I can be so stupid.”
Jackie was softly massaging the arm that she had grabbed as she could tell Alice was softening. “I’ll make it up to you, baby. I promise. Please forgive me?” Jackie asked contritely.
Alice thought quickly about how nice Jackie had been to her in their short relationship. She was really the only good thing in her life right now. She was a forgiving soul at heart and things up until now had been perfect between them. She gave Jackie a small smile. “Just be more careful in the future, alright.” And Alice moved into Jackie’s arms for a hug.
“You know I will, babe. I have an idea. Why don’t we go to that beachfront restaurant you’ve been talking about?”
Alice’s eyes showed shock and delight. “Are you serious? It takes months to get a reservation there.”
Jackie grinned “The owner is a good friend. I have a table whenever I want one.”
“Only if dinner includes dessert.” Alice cheekily replied. Jackie laughed and kissed her and said “You got it. I’ll even buy you one at the restaurant before we have one at home…”
That night when they got ready for bed, both women noticed the nasty bruise that had formed around Alice’s arm. “Baby? I am so sorry for that. I love you so much. I never meant to hurt you. I only want to take care of you.”
Alice believed her.
The bruise to her ribs came next. That one was supposedly an accident, but, happened after Alice spilled her coffee on Jackie’s new carpet. The black eye and bloody nose came after that. That was a slap after Alice forgot to pick up the dry cleaning. Jackie was again contrite and so sweet to Alice after that. Alice spent most of her time at Jackie’s house at that point and certainly did not leave with her face messed up — there would be too much explaining to do. Jackie treated her like a queen for those days as the bruises faded.
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WOW u are a very good writer!!!!! U got me hooked!!! Again very good chapter,pls let Dana kick Jackies ass PLEASE!!!! This chapter brought tears to my eyes,please,please continue!!! PPS
I wanna know who is going take care of jackie??? i’m so gald dana found alice, now let dana nurse alice back to health!great update!
Sorry when it comes to Al. I’m pretty straight up. Dana should just beat the shit out of jackie “Sorry accident.” And have like bette as a back up story. who would believe that little gay lezzie tennis star and a highly educated art titan would have gaul to beat someone up. I love you magoose. Great story great chapter
Poor Alice. No person should ever have to go through that. Dana needs to find Jackie and beat the bitch down!! After she takes care of Alice of course. This is really good. Can’t wait to see what Jackie does when she finds Alice gone. Post soon.
I am with HF. Have D bring her tennis racket and go for J’s head. It would take A a long long … time to get back to her old self. I can’t believe all the previous incidents actually happened. That was appalling. Thank you for letting A gather her strength and leave J this time. She should go to the police and file a lawsuit. God knows A will need the money for the many years of psychotherapy to come. The worst really is the emotional scar. Hopefully D would have the patience to take care of A and not run away this time. I am really looking forward to the next update. Thank you.
I’m with HD. Make some use for the racket and whack Dana! Alice definitely deserves more than this. I hope you’ll play this up more, i’s very interesting. thanks for updating Magoose, like you also go me hooked;D
Wow great chapter when Dana finds out what really happened to Al the rest of the girls are going to have to hold her back so she doesn’t kill that b***h Jackie. PPS
The best place to go is to the police. Let them take this from there. I know the gang will be with Alice, If I was Jackie I would stay away from them thanks
It is NEVER okay to beat up a woman. I don’t care if she’s with another person or if you think she’s the meanest person in the world. But this? Jackie deserves everything she gets knocked back at her with the rage of the storm! I have gone from nervous to worry and now…..ANGER. I hope they all gang up on Jackie and introduce her to a real fight at the hands of, in this order, Shane, Kit, Jenny, Carmen, Tina, Bette, Dana, and finally Alice. And to finish it up, have Alice say ‘By the way, we’re through…bitch!’ and have her kick Jackie in the ribs when she’s down.
ofcourse i love this story its a great story..wow i was surprised at the amount of hurt jackie has caused alice physically i mean im glad though shes seen the light fianlly, i hope u write a scene where dana and jackie fight and jackie gets her ass kicked that’d be so so good yay for danish!!
great post! poor alice but i’m glad dana found her.. pms
This story is absolutely wonderful! Im totally hooked! Please repost soon, hopefully Dana gives jackie a piece of her mind!
3 hours later, some scenes are still playing in my head. So I got out of bed to comment more. “The clothes she had worn to the party were rags now”; “The bruise to her ribs”; “Blackeye and bloody nose”; “caused her back to shoot pain up and down.” J must have whipped A severely. This just made me sick. MaGoose, I needed to hand it to you. You really got to me this round. You have done a fantastic job summarizing the past abuse. Portraying J as a very smart and violent abusers and her behavior, such as “usually slept very deeply after, well, after” was so spot on. I guess I am really taking this particular story to heart. It is too damn real. While you are at it, please let D bring A to the hospital and make sure that she did not get an infection. Salute, MaGoose. Hope I don’t get any nightmares tonight.