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Closure – Chapter 9
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Dana tracked down Jackie’s address and drove by her place. The house was dark and the mini was no where to be seen.
Dana racked her brains. Where would Alice go? Dana took a drive by the beach and did not see the mini in the parking lot. She then took a huge guess and headed over to Runyan Canyon. The relief when she saw the mini sitting by itself in the parking lot was palpable.
Dana grabbed a flashlight out of the trunk (although the moon was out and very bright) and headed out on one of the more popular trails. It was the one where Alice and Dana had made the Rules of Unattraction. Normally that thought brought a smile to Dana’s lips but she was way too concerned for Alice at this point.
Dana was moving quickly but tried to be as quiet as possible. This was both to not scare Alice and to be able to listen for any sound of her presence.
She was searching for about ten minutes and was about to call in their friends for additional manpower when she heard soft sobbing coming from a bench at one of the park overlooks.
Dana took just a second to let the relief wash over her body before slowly moving over to the bench. She made a little more noise — hoping Alice would realize there was someone nearby and not be too spooked when she spoke up.
“Alice…” Dana said softly.
Alice stood quickly, turned toward the voice and started moving backwards in panic.
“Al? It’s me, Dana. I didn’t mean to scare you. It’s OK.” Dana kept murmuring words of comfort as she slowly approached the writer. Alice seemed to understand that there was no immediate threat and slumped over a bit as she waited for Dana to reach her.
Dana went to hold Alice. Once she felt that Alice would not reject her advances she held her tighter. Unfortunately she happened to push against the welt on Alice’s back and she cried out in pain.
Dana immediately backed out of the hug but refused to take her hands off the writer. “God, Al, I’m sorry. Did I hurt you?”
“No.” Alice said with her eyes downcast. “I…uh…hurt my back. I fell down.”
“Oh honey!” Dana went once again to hold Alice. She was very careful to not press against any part of her back. Alice leaned into her and held tight and started crying. It felt like home. It felt like safety.
Dana pulled back for just a moment to take off her track jacket and wrap it around Alice. “Let’s get out of here. You’re going to catch cold if you stay out here much longer.” Alice let Dana put an arm around her shoulders to guide her back to the parking lot.
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WOW u are a very good writer!!!!! U got me hooked!!! Again very good chapter,pls let Dana kick Jackies ass PLEASE!!!! This chapter brought tears to my eyes,please,please continue!!! PPS
I wanna know who is going take care of jackie??? i’m so gald dana found alice, now let dana nurse alice back to health!great update!
Sorry when it comes to Al. I’m pretty straight up. Dana should just beat the shit out of jackie “Sorry accident.” And have like bette as a back up story. who would believe that little gay lezzie tennis star and a highly educated art titan would have gaul to beat someone up. I love you magoose. Great story great chapter
Poor Alice. No person should ever have to go through that. Dana needs to find Jackie and beat the bitch down!! After she takes care of Alice of course. This is really good. Can’t wait to see what Jackie does when she finds Alice gone. Post soon.
I am with HF. Have D bring her tennis racket and go for J’s head. It would take A a long long … time to get back to her old self. I can’t believe all the previous incidents actually happened. That was appalling. Thank you for letting A gather her strength and leave J this time. She should go to the police and file a lawsuit. God knows A will need the money for the many years of psychotherapy to come. The worst really is the emotional scar. Hopefully D would have the patience to take care of A and not run away this time. I am really looking forward to the next update. Thank you.
I’m with HD. Make some use for the racket and whack Dana! Alice definitely deserves more than this. I hope you’ll play this up more, i’s very interesting. thanks for updating Magoose, like you also go me hooked;D
Wow great chapter when Dana finds out what really happened to Al the rest of the girls are going to have to hold her back so she doesn’t kill that b***h Jackie. PPS
The best place to go is to the police. Let them take this from there. I know the gang will be with Alice, If I was Jackie I would stay away from them thanks
It is NEVER okay to beat up a woman. I don’t care if she’s with another person or if you think she’s the meanest person in the world. But this? Jackie deserves everything she gets knocked back at her with the rage of the storm! I have gone from nervous to worry and now…..ANGER. I hope they all gang up on Jackie and introduce her to a real fight at the hands of, in this order, Shane, Kit, Jenny, Carmen, Tina, Bette, Dana, and finally Alice. And to finish it up, have Alice say ‘By the way, we’re through…bitch!’ and have her kick Jackie in the ribs when she’s down.
ofcourse i love this story its a great story..wow i was surprised at the amount of hurt jackie has caused alice physically i mean im glad though shes seen the light fianlly, i hope u write a scene where dana and jackie fight and jackie gets her ass kicked that’d be so so good yay for danish!!
great post! poor alice but i’m glad dana found her.. pms
This story is absolutely wonderful! Im totally hooked! Please repost soon, hopefully Dana gives jackie a piece of her mind!
3 hours later, some scenes are still playing in my head. So I got out of bed to comment more. “The clothes she had worn to the party were rags now”; “The bruise to her ribs”; “Blackeye and bloody nose”; “caused her back to shoot pain up and down.” J must have whipped A severely. This just made me sick. MaGoose, I needed to hand it to you. You really got to me this round. You have done a fantastic job summarizing the past abuse. Portraying J as a very smart and violent abusers and her behavior, such as “usually slept very deeply after, well, after” was so spot on. I guess I am really taking this particular story to heart. It is too damn real. While you are at it, please let D bring A to the hospital and make sure that she did not get an infection. Salute, MaGoose. Hope I don’t get any nightmares tonight.