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Closure – Chapter 9
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“Alice? What the hell are you doing here at this time of night? Did you forget something when you were here earlier or were you intentionally trying to interrupt us during sex?” Bette sighed. It was the same manner she had talked to Alice in the past — teasing with no real anger. She was so pleased to see Alice. But this wasn’t the same Alice.
Alice turned around to face Bette and her face went white. “I’m sorry. You’re right. I wasn’t thinking. I’ll go.” Alice turned around and stumbled back towards the mini.
Bette reacted as quickly as she could. She ran down the steps and tried to stop Alice before she got in the car.
“Alice! Wait!” She forcefully grabbed Alice’s arm to get her to stop trying to open the door.
Alice cowered back and lifted her other arm as a shield. Bette was shocked at this response and released her hold.
“Alice? Are you OK? What’s wrong?” Bette asked softly, almost as if she were talking to Angelica.
Alice was beyond hearing. She just wanted to find somewhere safe and this wasn’t it. With her arm released, she quickly jumped in the mini and locked the doors. She drove off as Bette watched the taillights disappear around the corner.
Bette walked rapidly back into the house and Tina. “Alice is in trouble. Can you call Shane while I call Dana? We need to find her.”
Shane was out with Carmen and they immediately said they would check the various clubs that Alice used to frequent for any sign of the writer. It was decided that Bette and Tina would stay home in case she came back either there or to Shane’s. Bette kept calling Alice’s cell phone and just got voicemail.
Dana jumped in her car and started driving. She was cursing herself for letting Jackie leave with Alice. She knew something was wrong, but, it all happened so fast.
Dana first drove to Alice’s apartment. The lights were out. She used the key that Alice had given her back when they were just friends to open the door. The apartment had almost a musty smell — as if no one had been there in a while. She didn’t have time to think about it now. She had to find Alice.
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WOW u are a very good writer!!!!! U got me hooked!!! Again very good chapter,pls let Dana kick Jackies ass PLEASE!!!! This chapter brought tears to my eyes,please,please continue!!! PPS
I wanna know who is going take care of jackie??? i’m so gald dana found alice, now let dana nurse alice back to health!great update!
Sorry when it comes to Al. I’m pretty straight up. Dana should just beat the shit out of jackie “Sorry accident.” And have like bette as a back up story. who would believe that little gay lezzie tennis star and a highly educated art titan would have gaul to beat someone up. I love you magoose. Great story great chapter
Poor Alice. No person should ever have to go through that. Dana needs to find Jackie and beat the bitch down!! After she takes care of Alice of course. This is really good. Can’t wait to see what Jackie does when she finds Alice gone. Post soon.
I am with HF. Have D bring her tennis racket and go for J’s head. It would take A a long long … time to get back to her old self. I can’t believe all the previous incidents actually happened. That was appalling. Thank you for letting A gather her strength and leave J this time. She should go to the police and file a lawsuit. God knows A will need the money for the many years of psychotherapy to come. The worst really is the emotional scar. Hopefully D would have the patience to take care of A and not run away this time. I am really looking forward to the next update. Thank you.
I’m with HD. Make some use for the racket and whack Dana! Alice definitely deserves more than this. I hope you’ll play this up more, i’s very interesting. thanks for updating Magoose, like you also go me hooked;D
Wow great chapter when Dana finds out what really happened to Al the rest of the girls are going to have to hold her back so she doesn’t kill that b***h Jackie. PPS
The best place to go is to the police. Let them take this from there. I know the gang will be with Alice, If I was Jackie I would stay away from them thanks
It is NEVER okay to beat up a woman. I don’t care if she’s with another person or if you think she’s the meanest person in the world. But this? Jackie deserves everything she gets knocked back at her with the rage of the storm! I have gone from nervous to worry and now…..ANGER. I hope they all gang up on Jackie and introduce her to a real fight at the hands of, in this order, Shane, Kit, Jenny, Carmen, Tina, Bette, Dana, and finally Alice. And to finish it up, have Alice say ‘By the way, we’re through…bitch!’ and have her kick Jackie in the ribs when she’s down.
ofcourse i love this story its a great story..wow i was surprised at the amount of hurt jackie has caused alice physically i mean im glad though shes seen the light fianlly, i hope u write a scene where dana and jackie fight and jackie gets her ass kicked that’d be so so good yay for danish!!
great post! poor alice but i’m glad dana found her.. pms
This story is absolutely wonderful! Im totally hooked! Please repost soon, hopefully Dana gives jackie a piece of her mind!
3 hours later, some scenes are still playing in my head. So I got out of bed to comment more. “The clothes she had worn to the party were rags now”; “The bruise to her ribs”; “Blackeye and bloody nose”; “caused her back to shoot pain up and down.” J must have whipped A severely. This just made me sick. MaGoose, I needed to hand it to you. You really got to me this round. You have done a fantastic job summarizing the past abuse. Portraying J as a very smart and violent abusers and her behavior, such as “usually slept very deeply after, well, after” was so spot on. I guess I am really taking this particular story to heart. It is too damn real. While you are at it, please let D bring A to the hospital and make sure that she did not get an infection. Salute, MaGoose. Hope I don’t get any nightmares tonight.