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Closure – Chapter 10
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Dana very gently bundled Alice into her Mercedes. Alice was in no condition to drive and Dana was in no condition to let Alice out of her sight.
Dana was never a very decisive person. You could simply look at her relationship with Tonya or the whole Lara/Alice debacle as proof of that. But this evening everything she needed to do seemed to be clear and she was not going to ask permission. She was just going to take care of Alice the best she knew how. Dana headed towards her condo.
Dana got her first good look at Alice when she got her into the condo and seated on the sofa. She was a mess. Her hair was matted. Her face was red and blotchy from crying. Her eyes were vacant. She also seemed to be holding herself very oddly. She remembered what Alice said about hurting her back and wondered if that was why.
Dana pulled the blanket from the back of the couch and wrapped that around Alice as she was still shivering.
“Al, honey, I am going to get you some coffee try to warm you up. OK?”
This seemed to snap Alice out of her trance and she reached up to grab Dana’s arms.
“No. Please? Don’t leave just now. Please?” Alice begged. There was no way Dana would ignore the plea. She sat down next to Alice and carefully pulled her into her arms.
They stayed that way for several minutes until Dana could feel some of the tension leave Alice’s body. The shivers were still there and that concerned Dana mightily.
“Honey?” Alice looked at her and her eyes were like that of a child. “I’d like to run a tub for you to try and get you warmed up. Will you let me do that?”
Alice seemed to zone out for a few seconds and then said quietly “That would be nice. Thank you.”
Dana wasn’t about to leave Alice alone at this point and helped her get up and move into the master bathroom. She sat Alice on the toilet seat while she set about getting water in the tub with some of the bubbles and bath salts she used when she was soaking after a rough workout. She hoped that would relieve some of the pain Alice had in her back.
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Hey there! New Reader! Your story is just, it’s *gapes*. Yep, i’m speechless. It’s fantastic, it’s got so much going on and gave the characters so many dimensions, You’ve put a great spin on everything, the vunerablity of A and D being all ready to kick some serious butt. I’d go ninja on J’s ass, seriously, she wouldn’t be able to sit for a month, grrr. YAY DANISH! Great story, amazing writing, just great great great! PPS!
Another awesome chapter!!!!!! U rock sweety and please have Dana kick Jackies ASS lmfao!!! Well done!! PPS
Thank you for asking, I did not have any nightmares but it took me forever to fall asleep. So I re-watched S1 2nd disc for some A’s happier days, such as “my mom such a slutty, slutty, chicken-chasing pervert.” Anyhow, do not feel bad about your reader’s reactions. We have choices. It is because the story is so powerful, that is why it got to me. I thought I should let you know that you are really doing an awesome job. The last time it was that scary was reading Brteyes’ “Masked Feelings” Both A & D were physically hurt at different times. It was very hard to take. And also Layla Gray’s “Fear” when D was hurt badly. MaGoose, you are definitely heading towards the hall of Danish Fame. Back to this, I certainly welcomed a more sensitive and observant D. It is just what the doctor’s ordered. Now that we have a baseball bat and a tennis racquet, we can all march over to J’s and give her a taste of her own medicine. Thanks again.
WOW!! This was a great chapter. I’m loving the way Dana is taking care of her girl. But I can’t wait to see Aggressive Dana take out a can of whoop ass on Jackie. Pls continue soon.
Yep. You hurt a woman, you reap the consequences. You hurt Alice, you answer to her friends, her family, and to the police. You’re doing a great job on Dana taking care of Alice. I’d probably have her let Alice sleep in the master bed, Dana go about her house chores, but maintaining a constant vigil over Alice. There is no doubt that Alice needs her friends, who are her family, now more than ever. But she needs to get angry. It does no good repressing feelings of hate towards your abuser. She needs to get angry and soon. Please keep the love alive. (Gritting my teeth) And take the bitch down.
First the police,to keep Jackie away from Alice. Then let the gang do the rest. Let Shane shave her head, Dana with the tennis raquet.Tina with her right hook, let Bette beat the crap out of her.and Carman do her thing then give to to Alice to do the rest. That was a bit violent,just let the police take care of her. This does happen in the real world,so be thankfully its not in your world. thanks
I wanna see dana blew a gasket on jackie and then let others finish off whatever is left if there is any. great update….i hope dana can get alice to start thinking better of herself…
It’s officia, I love this story! You’re truly awesome Magoose. I’m very happy that Dana’s taking care of Alice for a change. I hope the other girls would be as helpful too, though I’m pretty sure they are and they’d be there with Alice this time around, hopefully. Thanks Magoose.
Hello MaGoose, I just wanted to say the last couple of chapters have been really amazing, so very deep. You are showing me a different side to both Dana and Alice, and I love it. I love how protective Dana is being of Alice, but I’m thinking once she tells the others about the stuff that has been happening to Alice the others might not be able to hold their anger in, let to rumble begin. I’m having second thoughts; I think Shane should take the B down. Keep up the amazing story, Sincerely, JC
Magoose. you have out done yourself. This story is ingredible. I freaking love it. Keep up the great work. I’m glad to see a few happy Danish moments. But i seriously have a baseball bat if Dana wants to borrow it to go speak to jackies car.
yeah! go dana..i loved the bathroom bit when one was in and the other just sitting beside them, you wrote that so well i found it so sweet! loved this one as usual :)