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Closure – Chapter 10
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Dana was still mulling possibilities over in her mind when she got back to the bathroom. She had left the door open when she went to make tea so she could hear Alice if she called. The sight that met her eyes shocked her.
Alice was still undressing with her back to the door. She was moving as if she were in her 80s instead of her 30s. She had her top off and was trying to get the sweatpants down. And across her back was a two-inch wide purple welt. It stood out in sharp contrast to Alice’s creamy white skin. That was no accident.
Dana stepped back out of the bathroom doorway before Alice could see her. It was as much to give Alice her privacy as it was to try and absorb what she just saw.
Someone had hit Alice. Someone had hurt Alice. Dana was pretty sure she knew who it was. Dana started shaking in anger. She was not a violent person by nature but sure felt she could easily kill the person that did this to her best friend. Right now she needed to focus, though. Taking care of Alice was her top priority.
She stayed out of sight of the bathroom until she heard Alice ease herself into the tub. By that time Dana felt she had herself composed and moved back to the bathroom doorway. “Al? I have your tea right here.” Alice turned her head and gave a weak smile. “Thanks, Dana.” Dana set the cup on the side of the tub. Alice was covered with bubbles and did not seem upset that Dana was there with her in the bathroom.
Dana sat herself down on the toilet seat. She reached forward to move some of the hair out of Alice’s face. “You want me to wash your hair?” Dana offered. Alice would have loved that, but, couldn’t figure out how to have Dana do it without noticing her bruises.
“No, thanks. I’ll take a proper shower in the morning.”
“OK.” They sat in companionable silence. Both were lost in their own thoughts. They didn’t know it, but, they were both thinking about the many times that they had been in the same position. One of them in the tub and the other sitting nearby. They would chat about what happened during the day or their plans for later. Sometimes they would debate whatever odd topic might spring to Alice’s mind. And sometimes they would both get in the tub and all thoughts of talk would go out the window.
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Hey there! New Reader! Your story is just, it’s *gapes*. Yep, i’m speechless. It’s fantastic, it’s got so much going on and gave the characters so many dimensions, You’ve put a great spin on everything, the vunerablity of A and D being all ready to kick some serious butt. I’d go ninja on J’s ass, seriously, she wouldn’t be able to sit for a month, grrr. YAY DANISH! Great story, amazing writing, just great great great! PPS!
Another awesome chapter!!!!!! U rock sweety and please have Dana kick Jackies ASS lmfao!!! Well done!! PPS
Thank you for asking, I did not have any nightmares but it took me forever to fall asleep. So I re-watched S1 2nd disc for some A’s happier days, such as “my mom such a slutty, slutty, chicken-chasing pervert.” Anyhow, do not feel bad about your reader’s reactions. We have choices. It is because the story is so powerful, that is why it got to me. I thought I should let you know that you are really doing an awesome job. The last time it was that scary was reading Brteyes’ “Masked Feelings” Both A & D were physically hurt at different times. It was very hard to take. And also Layla Gray’s “Fear” when D was hurt badly. MaGoose, you are definitely heading towards the hall of Danish Fame. Back to this, I certainly welcomed a more sensitive and observant D. It is just what the doctor’s ordered. Now that we have a baseball bat and a tennis racquet, we can all march over to J’s and give her a taste of her own medicine. Thanks again.
WOW!! This was a great chapter. I’m loving the way Dana is taking care of her girl. But I can’t wait to see Aggressive Dana take out a can of whoop ass on Jackie. Pls continue soon.
Yep. You hurt a woman, you reap the consequences. You hurt Alice, you answer to her friends, her family, and to the police. You’re doing a great job on Dana taking care of Alice. I’d probably have her let Alice sleep in the master bed, Dana go about her house chores, but maintaining a constant vigil over Alice. There is no doubt that Alice needs her friends, who are her family, now more than ever. But she needs to get angry. It does no good repressing feelings of hate towards your abuser. She needs to get angry and soon. Please keep the love alive. (Gritting my teeth) And take the bitch down.
First the police,to keep Jackie away from Alice. Then let the gang do the rest. Let Shane shave her head, Dana with the tennis raquet.Tina with her right hook, let Bette beat the crap out of her.and Carman do her thing then give to to Alice to do the rest. That was a bit violent,just let the police take care of her. This does happen in the real world,so be thankfully its not in your world. thanks
I wanna see dana blew a gasket on jackie and then let others finish off whatever is left if there is any. great update….i hope dana can get alice to start thinking better of herself…
It’s officia, I love this story! You’re truly awesome Magoose. I’m very happy that Dana’s taking care of Alice for a change. I hope the other girls would be as helpful too, though I’m pretty sure they are and they’d be there with Alice this time around, hopefully. Thanks Magoose.
Hello MaGoose, I just wanted to say the last couple of chapters have been really amazing, so very deep. You are showing me a different side to both Dana and Alice, and I love it. I love how protective Dana is being of Alice, but I’m thinking once she tells the others about the stuff that has been happening to Alice the others might not be able to hold their anger in, let to rumble begin. I’m having second thoughts; I think Shane should take the B down. Keep up the amazing story, Sincerely, JC
Magoose. you have out done yourself. This story is ingredible. I freaking love it. Keep up the great work. I’m glad to see a few happy Danish moments. But i seriously have a baseball bat if Dana wants to borrow it to go speak to jackies car.
yeah! go dana..i loved the bathroom bit when one was in and the other just sitting beside them, you wrote that so well i found it so sweet! loved this one as usual :)