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1.10 Tina
’Yes Cherie, you can devote yourself to ruining our beaches without worrying about me bon?’
’You promise?’
’I promise.’
A few tables away Kate sat with the assistant director. She smiled at me like always. I felt stupid. Maybe my loneliness thought to catch up on something that wasn’t there. ’Alright.’ I finished my coffee.
’Wait Tina. Bette wants to talk to you.’
I waited as the sounds of Paris in the morning cracked through the line. Or maybe it was just my imagination. The city would be bustling awakening with that vibrant energy that pulsed through its streets. Cafés and bakeries open their doors, sending aromas of good brewed coffee and buttery croissants into the air. Locals and tourists queueing up for their morning dose of caffeine, exchanging pleasantries and animated conversations as they savor their breakfast.
’I waited for you to call me back.’
’I fell asleep.’ I said it too fast, I knew it and so did she.
’You were ignoring me.’ She stated. A long breath followed and her voice got softer. ’I was worried, you must have known that.’
’It was just…’ I hesitated.
’Tell me.’ She waited. The large windows along one side of the room offered breathtaking views of the beach, where the production crew was already busy setting up the set for today. The fake blood of yesterday had dissolved during the night, the tide had done its job. And for me the night had changed nothing, the dancing shadows had eventually lured me into a restless sleep. ’If you want you can give him my number.’ Bette offered.
In the corner Tom had a table for himself, just like me. He had his phone pressed against his ear and a goofy smile lingered on his lips. ’Are you aware we’ve exchanged more words in the past few weeks than we did when you were in LA? But I forgot how to talk to you.’ I said looking down at my wedding ring. When I was 16 weeks pregnant my finger swell but I refused to take it off. ’It’s like, like, I don’t feel married to you.’
There was a muffled sob. But maybe I imagined that too. And then the line went dead.
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Hey ladies,
Welcome back!
I do remember Renee and the story of last year. I totally loved that one but this rewrite is catching my interest as well.
My heart is breaking for Bette and Tina, i want to cry for them and hope and wish they will find the love they once had.
And Renee being so sick, no cure possible. The catalist for Bette returning to Paris.
I’m looking forward to read the other parts.
A re-write? I’m curious to see what you’ve changed. I loved it the first time around and was waiting for an update.
Well, I’m off to reading now. :-)
It still hurts a lot to see T & B so miserable and unable to look at each other, let alone talk to each other.
I’m hooked again. Please more! :)
I was exciting seeing the tittle (not knowing of the meaning of 2.0 was). read the story eagerly, thinking it was another chapter of the other story. but then I read, Renee is still alive? hmm.. must be a past story, then.. I thought.. hmm.. it’s weird, the storyline seems different from the one without 2.0.
then I read Author Note, I should have read it sooner… hehehehe.. (so sorry.. I didn’t read the author note from the beginning because how eager I was to read it) so it is different story, with almost the same background .. and now I wonder what is the difference from the other one? well… my impression reading this one is less bitterness, a lot of stubbornness from both side,, and that makes me wonder what happened with them?
I love both stories, and can’t wait for the next one.. and thank you for sharing your work with us..
Ooh you’re back!! Thank you :)
I must say that this story is rather confusing to me… As you have no introduction into any background on this story. Who is Renee? Who is “I”… what’s going on… I am sorry to say that after 3 pages I simply quit reading as I still had no clue as what I was reading. If you are depending on the reader having read another story to figure out who these people are and what is going on, then you need to say so. But your story is like waking up and finding yourself somewhere you have never been before with people you do not know and why you or they are there… With any good story… you cannot assume your reader knows anything…. you must tell the reader what they need to know to get into the story..
I do remember your last story…. but I also remember that I had a great deal of difficulty following who was talking in your dialogue sequences… thus, I had a great deal of difficulty discerning the story line… Is this Bette talking or is it Tina? I guess some enjoy that style of story telling… I will say that I enjoyed Desert Rose far more than Uncharted Territory.
Good luck with this one. I wish you much success…