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Eyes black as coal burned on me. I could picture it vividly – the long lashes, the delicate nose, those perfect cheekbones, and that stubborn chin, all in perfect harmony. The door slammed shut as the doctor left, the sound reverberating. In that moment, I was acutely aware of my heart thudding against my ribs. Frustration pushed me to face her. ’Really? Was that really necessary?’
A palpable weight hung between us as she really looked at me, her eyes blinking slowly, adjusting to my presence. Her breath seemed to catch, suspended in the air.
In that moment, time itself seemed to halt. She stood there, still as a statue. The tick-tock of the clock on the wall echoed in the room, each sound punctuating the silence that enveloped us.
The world seemed to fade away as we locked eyes, the unspoken words and emotions of our time apart and the time before, hanging heavily in the air. It was a moment pregnant with the weight of all the fights, words left unsaid, the feelings left unexpressed, the uncertainty of what lay ahead. We stood there, two restrained souls connected by a shared history, grappling with the unspoken complexities of our reunion until Renee cleared her throat. ’That was quite a theatrical return even for you. Long flight I assume?’
When they hugged each other I left quietly.
1.2 Tina
I checked my watch. ’You’re awfully quiet tonight.’ Kate, the DP, whispered leaning over. ’Is everything ok?’
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Hey ladies,
Welcome back!
I do remember Renee and the story of last year. I totally loved that one but this rewrite is catching my interest as well.
My heart is breaking for Bette and Tina, i want to cry for them and hope and wish they will find the love they once had.
And Renee being so sick, no cure possible. The catalist for Bette returning to Paris.
I’m looking forward to read the other parts.
A re-write? I’m curious to see what you’ve changed. I loved it the first time around and was waiting for an update.
Well, I’m off to reading now. :-)
It still hurts a lot to see T & B so miserable and unable to look at each other, let alone talk to each other.
I’m hooked again. Please more! :)
I was exciting seeing the tittle (not knowing of the meaning of 2.0 was). read the story eagerly, thinking it was another chapter of the other story. but then I read, Renee is still alive? hmm.. must be a past story, then.. I thought.. hmm.. it’s weird, the storyline seems different from the one without 2.0.
then I read Author Note, I should have read it sooner… hehehehe.. (so sorry.. I didn’t read the author note from the beginning because how eager I was to read it) so it is different story, with almost the same background .. and now I wonder what is the difference from the other one? well… my impression reading this one is less bitterness, a lot of stubbornness from both side,, and that makes me wonder what happened with them?
I love both stories, and can’t wait for the next one.. and thank you for sharing your work with us..
Ooh you’re back!! Thank you :)
I must say that this story is rather confusing to me… As you have no introduction into any background on this story. Who is Renee? Who is “I”… what’s going on… I am sorry to say that after 3 pages I simply quit reading as I still had no clue as what I was reading. If you are depending on the reader having read another story to figure out who these people are and what is going on, then you need to say so. But your story is like waking up and finding yourself somewhere you have never been before with people you do not know and why you or they are there… With any good story… you cannot assume your reader knows anything…. you must tell the reader what they need to know to get into the story..
I do remember your last story…. but I also remember that I had a great deal of difficulty following who was talking in your dialogue sequences… thus, I had a great deal of difficulty discerning the story line… Is this Bette talking or is it Tina? I guess some enjoy that style of story telling… I will say that I enjoyed Desert Rose far more than Uncharted Territory.
Good luck with this one. I wish you much success…