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Bette’s Loss and Gain (Conclusion)
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“What happened to Ash? Did you guys ever re-connect?”
“We did. As horrible as it sounds, all of my thoughts were of one person. I felt so liberated. I mean, I knew what I had done to Ash, but I wouldn’t think about it. I was in complete denial about him and us. I walked around with this *****-eating grin…”
“Oh, Bette. Analingus. She was quite the teacher, wasn’t she?”
“The story’s finished Alice. You disgusting…”
“Oh, please. Remember, I know you. What happened?”
* * * * *
Bette had completed her final papers with days to spare, but the papers still needed to be typed. Marie Claire did excellent work, but she usually had seven to ten days from start to finish. Bette needed to get all of her papers in by the end of the week. She called Marie Claire and negotiated double what she normally paid for the typing of papers with the typist’s promise to complete them on time.
After dropping Gail off on campus, Bette headed over to Marie Claire’s apartment. She raced up the stairs, smiling broadly, thinking about being with Gail again within the hour. It had been all that she could do to pull herself out of Gail’s bed that morning and she was running hours behind. She had tried to leave her twice, but kept turning around for one more kiss. Gail’s last touches still burned on her body and she craved more. As soon as she gave Marie Claire the papers, she was going to pick Gail up from campus. After all, they had cause to celebrate—Bette had completed her assignments.
When she reached Marie Claire’s apartment door, she knocked and waited.
“It’s open,” Marie Claire called from inside.
Just as Bette turned the *****, the door opened and there was Ash. Her smile froze, then dissolved as he stared at her with a rage so apparent on his face.
“Hi,” she said softly.
“I hate you,” he whispered with a bitter venom as he pushed past her.
* * * * *
“Al, I knew I had fucked up with him, but to think that he hated me.” She shook her head. “I was beyond crushed. It tore me up. I knew he was mad, but for him to say that…”
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I just finished reading the entire story in one sitting and I am overwelmed. Gail had just the right amount of maturity and young Bette had just the right amount of immaturity. Everything was so believable and sweet. I have no idea how Alice sat through the telling without a cold shower at the end. Bravo, wonderfully compelling
God this was so amazing. You had so much raw emotion running through this whole story…i was suppoed to be in bed an hour ago to wake up for work in the morning. I read the forst two chapters and told myself i could finish tomorrow, but it was just too good. Wow…wow…
Excellent! It was made even better by having each chapter posted together so that I could read them all in one sitting. I haven’t put the laptop down since I started reading.
Awesome! I read them all – you got Bette totally right on. Careful the show may steal this story! And the music, I knew every song. Sugar Walls indeed.. write again soon.
Oh my God. This story was FANTASTIC! I couldn’t stop reading til I got to the end!
I sat up when I saw your name–excitedly I began to read. This story is amazing. Thank you for taking me into this voyage of self discovery. Love reading your works. Bravo!
Also wanted to say thank you for posting your entire story at once.
Okay I just read all of these and you are truly talented–your stories are so clear and vivid I feel like I know Bette a litte better. Thanks for sharing this. EXCELLENT!!!!!
This story is absolutely amazing. Thanks so much for sharing and for posting it all in one go. I truly enjoyed it.
That was an amazing journey…so powerful…I hope this isn’t the last we hear from you…I get so lost in your writing…beautiful portia…thank you.
BRILlIANT.
Thanks also for posting your entire story.
That was well written! Great story and thanks for posting it all at a go.
I had many things to do today but once I started your story I had to read through it all. Your writing is lively and vivid and great fun to read. Thank you so much.
Spectacular – wonderfully written throughout!! Hot and inviting!!
That was a wonderful story you are an excellent writer..But I wish you would have ended it with ore of a conclusion with Tina Please don’t end it here..
wow! every chapter was wonderful! i’m kind of dazed from the sheer power of the story itself and an added bonus of the imagery and your writing is astonding. very very good. thanks for writing this. :D
Wonderful story! Thanks!
Greaaaaaaaatttttt!!! thanks bunches…
Read your story into the wee hours of the morning. I just had to keep reading it was so beautiful. I love Bette and you really get her. Thanks for this great comming out story. I also want to say that your writting is wonderful, please give us more.
This was wonderful to read. Like every one else, I started the first chapter, thinking I would read a couple before going to bed. That didn’t happen, and the next thing I knew, it was 1:00…and I was wishing there was just one more chapter to read. Thank you so much. Your talent is big and out there for all to see…and is obvious with the very first sentence.
Bravo Portia! That was excellent. The detailed way you describe where they are, the dialogue…all of it is just fabulous. I look forward to more, of course! Thanks again for this.
Wow 5 stares. This is a amazing, every chapter I read is so much good and excellent! You do a great job and sharing this with us, I reall love it! Thank you so much for excellent story! I hope to see you on next time with more amazing story!
Loved this story. And I was psyched to see you had posted, as I used to read your stories when I first got into fan fic here. :D Excellent job. 5 stars!!