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Invincible
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She brushes her hair out of her face and turns to look at me with a lazy smile. I lean my body towards her so I’m now lying on my side between her body and the back of the couch. Slowly, she starts to twist so that she’s lying on her back looking up at me. We need not say anything. Our eyes speak for us. My fingers find hers and they play together as we continue to stare at one another. The television is merely background noise and for the first time, all those sappy songs that describe the intensity of falling for someone finally make sense. I’m 33 years old and plummeting for this woman.
My heart is pounding in my chest as I start to lie over her inching my face closer to hers. My lips are a whisper away from hers as I feel her hands gliding over my arms that are supporting my weight over her form. Our noses gently meet and I pull back slightly, keeping my eyes trained on hers. We’re both breathless and this little game we’ve undertaken is excruciating. I make a decision to kiss her but before I can dip close enough to her again, her soft words make me freeze.
“We better watch out.”
I tense up, but offer her a genuine smile. We continue to gaze at each other for a minute longer. Yes, this is most definitely real. The promise is too great to not savor it and walk away for now. ”Okay,” I breathe. I carefully lift myself up and off of her grabbing my coat from the back of the couch. The thrill remains thick in the air.
“Where are you going?” She whispers breathlessly.
“I left my number on your fridge.” I slip my coat on and make a courtly bow then lean over to grab her signed drawing of me off of her coffee table. I can already feel the loss of her company but vow that we will further explore this again in due time.
“Come here.” She sits upright and beckons me with a delicate finger. “I want to tell you a secret.”
I pause from my retreat for a moment and wonder what she has to say. In this fleeting instant, I picture making a life with this girl. A girl I’ve known for only a matter of hours. I return to where she is sitting and stand before her. Again, she crooks a finger for me to lean closer to her and I oblige. She tentatively grabs a sweet, yet passionate kiss from my lips. My eyes have closed at the contact and I stay put for an extra moment longer kissing just her upper lip, leaving no doubt as to the potential of our future.
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Enjoyed your story even tho i know nothing of vanilla sky.This epihany that BETTE finally has regarding her company and the warning from a trusted friend makes for an enjoyable read.TINA appears to be the alter ego of BETTE the uncanny ability to read her and is spot on in that drawing.BETTE has some life altering/style changes to make so let’s see what happens becuz for a one off you left a lot unanswered yet it was thought provoking in a good way.
Thanks for your comment, Dunn! Perhaps not having seen the film makes for a better read, although I know what you mean by all the unanswered questions. Even though this is a one-off, I have not completely ruled out possibly coming back to it in the future for a follow-up. There’s no plan to do that right now, but it is always an option. I appreciate you taking the time to read it and offering your feedback!
Great art work!
You never disappoint me. I enjoyed it a lot. You do know how to tell a tale. Thanks
You are too kind, wkm. I’m very happy that you enjoyed the story. Thanks for showin’ the love!
Hope you continue to post stories. I do love your tales.
This is so cool and sexy! I never watch Vanilla sky, but I’ll be damn, I think BnT suit the part so well.
Perhaps I prefer my readers not to have seen the movie. It’s definitely a weird one. But I thought these scenes of a hopeful budding relationship worked with Bette and Tina in those roles. Glad you liked it!
Not seen Vanilla Sky but don’t feel it detracted from finding this story fascinating. I really enjoyed the read and hope that you do consider it as a base for more as this budding relationship between my favourite couple certainly has potential.
Thanks
Don’t think I’ve ever had anyone comment that my stories were ‘fascinating’ so thank you for the compliment Sassy! A follow-up isn’t completely off the table, but just not actively in the works at present. Appreciate you taking the time to read.
Waittttttt! No way!!! I love Vanilla Sky and the older one Abre los ojos! What can I say I can’t resist a naked Penelope Cruz (>ω< )!!!
It wasn't THAT weird to me tbh, I freakin cracked up and cried my eyes out when Penelope said to Tom "I'll see you in another life when we're both cats."
Ahhh old movie, good times! Didn't think I'd see the gay version of the story. Nicely done!
Hahahaha! I suppose the best reason to watch those films would be a naked Penelope. She’s not really my cup of tea, I’m more of a Salma Hayek fan, but she was great in these films. Like I said, I have a love/hate relationship with it. Thanks for reading, hope I did the story justice since you seem to be the only one who has seen the movie so far.
MEEEEOOOOOWWW!
yeeeeeeeeessssss….. you know how long I have agonised about seeing this piece come up…. I miss you my friend. I feel we have resumed our game of tag… you posted… I posted too! guees it’s your turn again ;0) xx
Brilliant, as always, Mell. I have missed your amazing storytelling. I hope you will give us more, if not this story, something else. Oh wait!! Don’t you have something else you’re working on? Like just a chapter or two left? OMG, you do…. Yay!!
Look forward to whatever you write.
ps
Salma Hayek? Nice.
Yes, Salma Hayek. I can’t quite put my finger on it (but I can definitely put my finger in it :p), but I have a thing for slightly older women. Just something about them I can’t get enough of. And thank you for your very kind words, even though they aren’t very subtle. I’ll try to write something or two somethings when I can.
GREAT!!! I know and a like Vanilla Sky (with Tom Cruz and Penelope Cruz) . Vanilla Sky is a Hollywood remake of another great movie – the spanish movie “Abre Los Ojos” (with Penelope Cruz and Eduardo Noriega) And I like so much your story , Invincible with Bette and Tina :))) THANK YOU!!!
Thanks, Leonora! You seem to be one of the few readers who have also seen the movie and bonus points for having seen the original Spanish film!!
I loved this new version of Vanilla Sky,
I saw the movie however vaguely lenbro
some scenes, it would be interesting if you
continue to write its version.
All Stars.