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Inside the hotel room, Lara poured Tina a bourbon as Tina set her things down. She swallowed the drink in one gulp, needing to calm her nerves, then handed it to Lara for another. Turning to the woman with the towels, she said “Jennifer. Bette told me…”
“Ahhh, well then. Good.” Jennifer replied, placing the towels down on the table. She took her wig off and shook her hair, the need for disguise over.
“I can not thank you enough, I owe you two now…” and with that Tina enveloped Jennifer in a huge hug, clearly startling the other woman.
“I assure you that Bette is the one who owes me… and she will pay handsomely” Jennifer teased, then turned to face both women.
“I have dealt with men like Eric before. He is dangerous. He thinks he is control now but add alcohol and repeated rejection to the mix and he may snap. Don’t let down your guard. I have to go; I have a plane to Kenya to catch. I have already stayed longer then I intended. I believe you have Tasha to rely on now, but really the best approach is to never be caught by yourself, Tina. Believe me when I say that this can get ugly very quickly and I would hate to read about you in the paper.”
“I understand. Thank you again” Tina said warmly, taking a long sip of her second drink.
Jennifer walked up to her and gently took the glass from Tina’s hand then poured it down the sink.
She spoke in a low voice, “perhaps you didn’t hear me. He is dangerous. You must not drink anything alcoholic tonight… at least not until Bette gets here… it will only cloud your judgment and make you vulnerable. I am very serious, Tina. Men like him get away with all sorts of nasty business because they can. Things like rape and sodomy. Now do you understand?”
Tina nodded, the realization that she still hadn’t taken Eric seriously hitting her in the gut. For the first time she saw why Jennifer could handle someone like Eric. She had a glint in her eye that made her look dangerous. Tina felt sick to her stomach. Her face went pale at Jennifer’s words.
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Good chapter….I like the way you explain Shane missing the plane. However, not a good idea for this group to get tipsy before they get on that plane for Chicago. I assume that it is a three or four hour flight from LA to Chicago and they all need all their senses and skills to protect Tina. Eric scares me and now that Jennifer is gone, Tina is down to Tasha and Lara. If Eric get violent, they can be easily be rendered helpless. Eric’s next move will be during or after the dinner. Bette and team will arrive too late to attend. or if they are fortunate just as they are leaving the venue to go back to their hotel rooms. This will be a crucial time for Tina and her safety. I hope they have a plan to cover this.
This is really tense, but I love how tender Bette and Tina are with each other…..But they need to stop drinking…sleep on the plane. Eat a good meal and prepare to do battle.
This story keeps me breathless with anticipation….cannot wait for another chapter….
Martha! Your question prompted me to goggle the flight from LA to Chicago and it said 4.5 hours so you are not far off in your assessment. Assuming Bette’s flight was around 11 with a four hour delay that would put her boarding at 3ish and landing 7:30 – BUT there is a two hour delay (ahead) for Chicago so that makes her landing at 9:30. Add in baggage time and ride to the hotel…. and well, it will be late. I love how you notice all the details and so appreciate you commenting and following!
Working on the next chapter now, my brain is trying on different scenarios…
BK,
I guess sometimes I get a little technical and literal in my analysis. I always put myself in the role of each of the characters to see if things at least make sense in reality. It always amazes me that people are able to make these long trips and have the energy to have major meetings and make major decisions with little or no rest. I find travel to be very tiring and it takes me a good sleep before I can start to function on a level which I feel comfortable with. But of course these characters are significantly younger and more fit than I am, so they do not have those kind of problems.
I am glad that you appreciate my comments – even if they are off the wall. But I am one who believes that the more feedback I can give as a reader, it will at least give you the writer a little different prospective as to what your story is being perceived. If this is meeting your expectations, then you are accomplishing your goal. But in the end, this is your story and you get to take it where ever you want to take it. I’m just here for the ride. I like your plots and your characters. I find that your description of their motivations and emotions and actions is really similar to how I perceive the characters to be. Your Bette and Tina make me feel comfortable and make me wish that they actually existed and were in my circle of friends. In a way, I guess they are.
Your stories are a real joy in my life and I hope you keep it up. Thank you for your responses.and your stories.
My dear Martha, I absolutely love your analysis – and I use that word on purpose because you really draw on the story and see the big picture. PLease please keep them coming! I am not a writer so I love that you and other readers help me keep on track and remember the details. I am a social worker and I am endlessly fascinating by behavior – what motivates people, why they do what they do – so this writing this has been so much fun and your comments – as well as others – add that extra layer of fun to the whole process.
This is a good example – I need Bette to arrive late in Chicago for the story to work And I need her tired and frustrated and on edge – so I love that you picked up on the drain such a journey takes. Personally, traveling wrecks me! Especially by plane. I need days to recover, lol. Anyway, please keep commenting and letting me know your thoughts – the good the bad the wonderful – it helps me write! Peace, happy Friday!!
BK
Tasha &Lara to rescue !!!
YES! For now… ;)
“This was a deeper love, this was what had been missing all along. This was a love that trusted, that did not seek to control or shape. That allowed the other to be, complicated and layered as they were.”
My, dear BK, I’m just beginning this very awaited chapter and these words are, for me, the perfect definition of true love – mutual trust and total acceptance of each other’s possible failures or emotional scars…
Unconditional love, period.
And that touches something so deeply personal in me, in this very complex part of myself and my past, so I thank you, as simply as that…
Now, I continue ! I cannot wait to find this despicable Eric and this so endearing thriller of yours *wink*
Therese, I love how you zone in on the most tender and character driven parts of this story. I loved this passage too…. I wrote and rewrote it several times trying to get the wording right. I so appreciate that you took notice and that you liked it too. I look forward to hearing what you think as the story continues to evolve… Thanks
Great chapter! But you have me feel very worried now with what will happen in the next chapter!
Tina is so naive. Alcohol is the main component in associate sexual assaults. Eric is a psychopath with evil intent for her. He feels like she is his subject to abuse. No drinking, no meetings, no where with public support. Lock her herself in the room with Lara and wait for Bette. Everyone gets ill when they travel. Call and stay put. After saying all that, she his disappeared , Bette is on the pursuit and drama has shown her face. Please keep her safe, BK! Tina would never recover from the type of assault Eric plans for her and Bette will feel responsible. No woman deserves that kind of trauma. (Please remind others if there are trigger moments in your next post.)
Magic you are so right. Thank you for the reminder about the trigger warning especially. I agree that alcohol is the main component in associate sexual assaults. And that Tina is so very naive. Appreciate you commenting and reading. Part of me is ready for this part of their story to be over, I find Eric very difficult to write. Peace and happy saturday….
BK, thanks for this chapter. I’m late with comments but I’m still catching up after a busy week.
The beginning was very sweet. Balm for the heart. It’s amazing how you always find different words to picture their lovemaking, make it even more intense, more intimate, more emotional. Love it.
The plot thickens. I hope Tina listens to Jennifer. It was more than careless to resort to alcohol to calm her nerves. She should instruct Lara to cut her off alcohol while in chicago.
The same goes for Bette as well. She was so adamant about it when she told Tina to avoid it while around Eric. How could she forget about her own “rule”? Why being so irresponsible? It doesn’t look like she takes the danger Tina is in very serious herself.
Martha is right about getting tipsy. The flight might be too short to be sober again. Even if the liver will break down the alcohol with maybe 0.1 permille per hour, Bette sounds like she drank a lot. The same goes for Alice and Shane. Didn’t they talk with Lucy? They know what Eric is capable of.
Tina will probably have to face Eric on her own. I fear for her safety. On the other hand it could be important for her self-confidence if she’d be able to defend herself successfully against Eric on her own.
BK, waiting for the next part is really trying my patience. We can’t leave Tina all alone for a week! ;-)
Maybe I start re-reading the story for the second time to bridge the time to your next posting.
I just love your story!