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Si me ves, o no
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Jorge heard the small noise and turned to look at her. “Oh hey there. Good morning.”
She instantly clinched the front of her clothes. She thought there would be no one in the house so she just threw on Bette’s robe on her way out.
He smiled at the reaction and looked away. “Someone had a wonderful night, I suppose? Vincent asked me to send a maid to Jodi’s room so you can take the day off.” A little smirk was evident in his voice. “My apologies for dragging her out of bed so early. But she’ll be back in time for lunch.”
“Oh, that’s fine.” Tina went to the cabinets for the milk bottle. She wanted to ask why he was not on his way to the deal but she should have not known anything about it. It would be stupid of her to just ask that. So she needed to be tactical. “Where is everybody?”
“All over the town by now.” He had an indecipherable smile on his face. “House cleaning.” He soon changed the topic and started talking about the news.
Tina glanced at the clock again, fifteen minutes to ten. At this pace, she doubted Pulpo would be doing any deals today, at least not with the rest of his men. There was something wrong, very, very wrong and she could not understand what he meant by “house cleaning”. After all, it was not a good idea to give the wrong message that she clearly did not understand herself. So she drank up her milk, and ran back up to try figure out the situation.
Time barely passed by when she was all alone, staring at the ceiling in Bette’s bed. Tina wondered if she misunderstood anything from last night’s conversation between the brunette and the drug lord. But she replayed it in her head again and again, not finding any new lead. It was killing her, to think so hard but not to discover a single useful information.
Then she thought of Bette, for the millionth time this day. She didn’t know what the brunette was doing out there but at least she had the confidence that no cop would be waiting to ambush her on her way home. And that was because she wouldn’t be reporting anything to the force. There again, the eternal struggle. She was too personally involved in this case to be objective and unattached. This made her a bad undercover.
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First thing first, SO to the lovely ladies reading and commenting!
Simonem, yep I changed quite a few things here and there, hope you find my pace comfortable.
doc, bibi, lipitora, SG, wkm, thanks for stopping by, ladies. I do my best to not disappoint!
lakeeskin Awww thanks so much for stepping up as a rep of the silent readers. Lots of love to you!
TN1, you know how much I love you… too much to be spoken, so I gift you my story instead :)
doris, mscully, Lishalove, thanks guys! Stop by anytime and lots of love to you as well!
Ahh I know you expect longer chapters. But this just seems like a right place to stop. I’ll let you guys imagine what happens to that bastard Henry for a while.
As for the poem in the chapter, I did the translation, my apologies in advance to any Spanish speaking readers, I know very little about poems or Spanish for that matter…
But the original version, in Chinese mind if I add, was absolutely breathtaking and heartbreaking. It’s the sixth Dalai Lama’s love poem “To see or not to see”, also changed it a bit coz I can’t remember the exact words.
Ok, now back to work, hopefully I’ll post another very soon.
Peace :)
Really liked the poem. So Henry is going to trap himself. Hope Bette and Tina are smarter than Jorge. Loved it, thanks
This chapter is the falling in love chapter. We. Know Bette loves Tina… She always has. Tina cares deeply for Bette and she is trying to understand why. This chapter had all of the elements of two people falling… The push, the pull, give and take, desire and will to protect and support. That’s the story but the way YOU wrote it is just as harmonious for us. We fall in love too… with the characters, the story, and the author. You are doing to us what Bette and Tina are doing to each other… A little give, a little mystery, wanting, hoping, etc. I love that you ended this chapter at this point. As any new lover I want to wonder about “what’s next” and I want to be comforted in my knowledge that I will be taken care of. Still loving this story.
Nice, sweet, and entertaining chapter. I loved it!
Wonderful update, keeps you interested.
Jorge is a very smart man and Henry seems to meet his destination.
Pps.
I really liked this chapter.
You’re very talented, but I have repeatedly told you. :)
I really enjoy the way you weave in mysterious fibers in this story. I liked it in the end you’re left temporarily in our imagination, what will happen.
I’m so glad that Tina was so smart to find a suspicious situation. and Bette and her, so no one was hurt in the end.
I hope they will eventually figure out how to go beyond Jorge brains.
It was a great chapter. I’m looking forward to the next one!
yeah,I like what you have done,but next time please mark it with NC-17,I want to be well prepared,you know what I mean!
The poem was beautiful just like this progressing story. Thankful for your imagination and talent to put it in writing!!
Different and interesting story. I worry though about them all the while I’m reading!
Love every chapter! Can’t wait too see how things go between Bette, Tina and the mob. Oh, and no need to solve this quickly, the longer the story, the better for us! ;)
Hmmm now i am worried about Tina cause if Henry is going to die he may give up info about her Then what would Tibette do !!!
Loved the chapter, I hope Bette is smart enough to get out of this situation by giving up evidence and helping Tina get the bad guys. PPS
Beautiful and wonderful poem, I love poems.
Bette lovely dedicated so much love Tina,
and I’m still concerned about the fact
Bette really be a criminal.
10 Stars.
go to the next chapter.