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    Story written on November 6, 2005 by buildmeupbreakmedown.
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    Story Shortlink: https://lesfan.com/?p=57488
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    And she just looks at me… and smiles


    Shane wasn’t far behind and with a few more strokes she went sailing over the edge after Carmen. It felt like snow flakes of fire fell on her body, spread and then soaked into her skin. She was grunting and muttering “*****, *****, I love you, so much” and then collapsed onto Carmen.


    Give her a pretty box


    “That was… wow” Carmen said after she finally caught her breath, her muscles feeling like elastic bands. She purred as she felt soft lips kiss and lick her neck.


    “Glad you liked it” Shane replied with a self satisfied smug which earned her a slap on the arm.


    “Yeah, well you seemed to enjoy yourself too”


    “Of course I did. How couldn’t I when I have the sexiest girlfriend alive” she said as she placed a lingering kiss on her forehead.


    Carmen smiled contentedly, “So where’s the rest?”


    It took a few moments for Shane to realize what she was referring to but when she did,she felt the nervousness creep back up on her. ‘Now or never’.


    She got up and put on her boxers and buttoned up her shirt halfway. Carmen watched on curiously with a sheet wrapped around her. Shane walked over to her backpack and pulled out the box, a black velvet number that would change her life forever.


    She held it in her left hand in a tight fist so Carmen wouldn’t see it and knelt down next to the bed.


    “Carmen, I love you. I love the way you smell, the way you sound, the way you look, the way you think. I love everything about you and I consider myself blessed to have you in my life because you are the most beautiful person that I’ve ever had the privilege to know.”


    You better fill it


    “And I…” she showed Carmen the box, “would consider myself the happiest woman in the universe, if you would marry me.” And inside that box was a 2 carrot diamond that Shane had bought with whatever meager savings she had. The look on Carmen’s face told her it was worth every penny.


    One hand was clasped over her mouth and the other firmly on her racing heart, she knew this day would come but she didn’t think so soon. *****, she wasn’t complaining though.

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    1. i love you! that was great!….and hot hot HOT! the song was a great backdrop for the story. wow shane asking carmen’s hand in marriage. thanks for a great sharmen story!

    4. This one should definately get an award! I loved this story! Makes me wish you’d write a sequal (cos this seemed like a stand-alone?). This made my little closet-romantic heart go pitty-pat lol. Seriously, very romantic; sweet beyond words; and as wittybanter said: “hot hot HOT” and the song did fit in here. Very nice. 5 stars for ya. No doubt. So, any way I, or anyone else, could possibly persuade you to do a sequal?? :D

    5. OMG!!!! this is da coolest shane ever. DAMN!! i hope carmen n shane get it 2gether to make dis last. oh dis is da sweetest thing in da world. **teary eyed** please post soon. PEACE.

    6. OMG!!!! this is da coolest shane ever. DAMN!! i hope carmen n shane get it 2gether to make dis last. oh dis is da sweetest thing in da world. **teary eyed** please post soon. PEACE.

    11. Puppy! I’m a sucker for foof, and you’ve combined it with some hot sex. This story would be stronger without the excerpts of lyrics or whatever they are.

    12. Great story, trying to make it hard on the rest of us are you. I’m so glad you’ve joined in. I hope you continue to write and I’ll continue to read. Great story and thank you. Deb

    13. Omg.omg.omg.That’s all I’m gonna say.;) Well I lie. YOU ROCK!!!!!! Love the song, love the story. I just wonder why did Carmen start to doubt if saying yes was the right thing to do? Does she think Shane will not go trough with it? And I must say that was one hot sex scene, totally made me horny:D Update soon PLEASE!!!

    15. So damn good. Shane’s romantic side is HOT! Pleasantly surprised by the proposal. What are Carmens doubts? Are they about herself or does she feel Shane is unable to completely change for this relationship? Con’t Please

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