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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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Alice wasn’t almost everyone and she never would be. The blonde stood
out from the first moment that Dana met her because of her gentle
honesty. That was really the only way the athlete could think of
describing it because since that first meeting Alice had always been
honest with her but unlike others, her brand of honesty never hurt Dana
and never made her feel scared or ashamed or lonely or even different.
All it made her do mostly was laugh and then think. God, how much Alice
had made her think in the beginning.
Think about how the life she had been living was empty and lonely and
lacking so very much that she hadn’t even been aware of the
overwhelming amount until Alice appeared. From day one the tennis
player had a crush forming on her friend, it was nearly impossible for
that not to happen considering how her life had been changed so
completely just from simply knowing Alice and no matter how meager it
appeared on the surface of her life, Dana knew she truly was happier.
That she was happier from knowing Alice than from not.
Which is why their separation tore at her. Those days that turned into
weeks that turned into months which seemed like endless years. An
emotional version of a of bitter cold winter that nipped at her
constantly, hitting her with sharp and unmerciful winds and just when
she thought some respite might be coming, that it could finally be
over, it would start up again but stronger than before. The sting of
memory after memory assaulting her heart.
She wanted to forget what it was like, more than anything. To forget
how it felt when Alice came into her life. The simple joy created from
being able to call her when she thought a girl in the grocery store was
flirting with her and discussing it with endless detail, to the point
that the blonde demanded she come over for dinner so they could figure
this out. Then the return trip to the grocery store two days later
where the girl, whose name was Tracy, spoke with Dana again and Alice
hid in the cereal aisle to analyze their interaction. And then the
hours the writer spent coaching and helping Dana find the perfect way
to ask Tracy out after getting her number during their second meeting.
All of those things and more, she tried to forget.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again