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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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The problem was, the more that Dana tried to forget the harder it
became. There were too many memories and they seemed to live in the air
itself and no matter how hard Dana worked she couldn’t escape them.
Memories like the first time she woke up holding Alice in her arms, how
the way her hair sticking up at every angle had tickled her nose and
brought the athlete out of her slumber. And how Alice managed to look
cute even while she was half asleep and cursing at Dana for making fun
of her bedhead. It had been one late Sunday morning when Lara’s hair
tickled her nose that same way, once again causing her to wake up and
for several painfully brief moments, Dana thought it was like that
time. That it was Alice in her bed and in her arms but then she opened
her eyes and saw the truth.
It wasn’t Alice and it might never be Alice again.
When she realized this, Dana went into her standard mode of operation
and immediately began to isolate herself from Lara. Pulling away from
the chef in so many little ways that began to slowly pile up one after
one. Things like never offering up the details of her day unless asked
and even when asked, never speaking in depth on them and certainly
never giving her feelings on the events that happened to her. An
indifference to what their plans would be and the places they would go.
The tennis player knew what she was doing to Lara and she knew she was
hurting the redhead but she couldn’t seem to make herself stop. She
couldn’t tell Lara the truth, that would hurt her too much, and she
couldn’t end it herself without giving reason.
And they continued on this way until Lara finally ended their romance
out of frustration and hurt. Watching her walk off that day, shoulders
slumped in defeat and sadness, Dana hated herself but she knew it was
for the best. Because she couldn’t forget Alice and if she couldn’t
forget Alice then how could she ever really be able to truly give
herself to Lara in the way she knew the redhead wanted? It was
impossible. But it wasn’t nearly as impossible as what Dana wanted most
of all. To have her relationship with Alice back, to once again have
that love and that laughter and that limitless joy for living.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again