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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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“What?” asked Alice with a laugh, allowing the athlete to harmlessly
poke at her sides despite the fact she was rather ticklish there. “I
had to wipe my hands somewhere, didn’t I?”
“Not on my pants,” said Dana huffily. She looked to Bette and Tina in
sheepish desperation. “Do you think you guys can take her back? I want
to clean up what she,” Dana jerked her head at the still laughing
Alice, “just did.”
“Of course,” said Tina, rising to her feet and gently detaching
Angelica’s tiny hands from Dana’s hair. “Come to Mommy,” she said with
a smile and a coo in her voice.
“I’ll come with you, I still have more to clean up,” said Alice who
laughed again when the tennis player scowled at her and proceeded to
walk to the bathroom without saying another word.
When Alice arrived at the bathroom she found it empty except for the
brunette who was busy wetting a towel and wiping it on her pants.
Chuckling lightly on seeing this, Alice said, “You do know you’re
cleaning up water with more water, right?”
“I’m wearing black pants, Al,” said Dana, rolling her eyes in something
close to irritation but it was hard to be mad at the blonde since she
did see the humor in her actions. “I can’t use soap because it will
show up all white and blotchy and ugly. Plus I don’t think it would be
exactly good for the material and I know my mother would lecture me if
she noticed.”
“You’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things,” said Alice
with good natured exasperation, setting her purse down and pulling out
some travel baby wipes. Ripping them open, she tossed the package around
Dana to perfectly land it in the trash. Alice then knelt down to wipe
at the area she had used for her temporary towel. Peering up at Dana,
she wore a tiny grin and said, “You’re mad, aren’t you?” Pausing to add
playfully, “Germaphobe.”
“I’m not a germaphobe,” said Dana, scowling once more and folding her
arms across her chest. “I just don’t appreciate being used for your
personal wiping whatever. To quote you on speaking about Tina’s
conversational habits when she was first pregnant: it’s really nasty.”
“It was nasty of me,” admitted Alice. Finished cleaning off Dana’s
pants and smiling the look of unconscious approval on the tennis
player’s features, Alice rose to her feet, craning to one side as she
tossed the baby wipes into the trash. Resting against the counter she
looked at Dana with affectionate brown eyes and a grin tugged at her
lips as she said, “I’m sorry for using you for a towel, Dane. It’s just
you’re the only person I felt comfortable doing that to and I know it’s
not PC to say this but fuck it,” Alice shrugged her shoulders. Then she
leaned close to the athlete and said, “Just because it’s a baby that
slobbers doesn’t mean it isn’t gross.”
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again