Fan Fiction
This story has been set to a rating of NC-17. Age verification is required to proceed.
All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
Login to add story to favorites
(17 votes, average: 4.76 out of 5)You need to be a registered member to rate this post.
Loading ...
“I remember them mocking the fuzzy wuzzy slippers,” said Tina, scowling
deeply or attempting to scowl deeply as that kind of expression wasn’t
really suited for her features.
“Shane,” said Carmen as she nudged her girlfriend and snuggled her chin
on the stylist’s shoulder. “Tell me what the Bette and Tina
questionnaire is about. The way that conversation wanders with all of
us I’ll never find out if we get away from the topic for too long.”
Releasing the sound of a cracking whip, Alice snickered and dodged
Shane’s attempt to whap at her and somehow not hit Dana and Angelica,
who was still sporting the blonde’s glasses on the top of her head, in
the process. The hair dresser failed and Alice grinned in triumph as
she rested comfortably against Helena. “To answer your question,
Carmen, the Bette and Tina questionnaire was something that we created
when they were trying to get pregnant and had become insufferably
boring in their couplehood. Plus they were sharing really, really, and
I mean really nasty body function type information with us that we
didn’t need to know. So we made up this questionnaire that listed all
of their various boring and nasty body function wrong doings as to show
them the error of their ways. I’m sorry, Jenny,” said Alice as she
turned her attention to the petite brunette with a grin. “We never
found out their scores.”
“Que sera,” Jenny replied, halfway singing the song lyric and swaying as she did so.
Everyone present shared mutual amused looks at the latest bit of
endearing Jenny oddness then focused their attention on Dana who
released a cry when Angelica decided it was a good idea to try to stuff
Alice’s glasses into her mouth. “Al!” she said with a laugh, moving the
baby around so the journalist could retrieve her glasses. “You might
want to get these out of her mouth before she sucks out one of the
lens.”
“Baby Hoover Suction,” Alice laughed pleasantly, reaching into the
baby’s mouth to delicately remove the glasses. Once she had them in her
grasp she stared at the baby slobber with a scrunched up look of
disgust then immediately formed an impish expression and wiped her
hands on Dana’s pants.
“Ewww, gross! Alice! Why did you do that?” Dana exclaimed, looking at
her slobber covered pants with a good deal of dismay and wincing as
Angelica released a cry of amusement and tugged on the tennis player’s
far shorter hair.
Comments
Leave a Reply
You must be logged in to post a comment.
OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again