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Drowning – 23
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“Dana, are you going to answer me? Dammit! You know I deserve some sort of answer. You haven’t said ***** to me that makes any sense. You are my partner and my best friend, I wouldn’t expect this from you. Dammit, talk to me!”
“I’m sorry, Al. I really am.”
“Yeah, well sorry isn’t cutting it anymore, I need something more substantial than that. Come on, Dane.”
“Will you tell me what cause the change, Al? Last night you said you understood that I needed time.” Dana, who was biting her lip, looked up at Alice and saw that she was about to go into a rant again, “I know, I know, you are allowed to change your mind, but I just want to know what cause it. Please, Al.”
Alice threw her body in frustration, “Fine, Dane. I was out with Bette and Robin, getting good and drunk because you hurt me tonight…”
“Wait, I hurt you tonight? Al, what did I do?”
“The doorbell, hello? It was like you really left, you rang the doorbell to our house. Dane, you have been walking in to my house for longer than we have been together, and now you ring the bell in your own damn house.” Alice spat out, her eyes once again, threatening to spill.
“No, Alice, that wasn’t it. Really, it wasn’t. I just, I don’t know how to act. I don’t know what’s right. I didn’t think I had the right to just walk in anymore. I didn’t know what to do.” Her eyes were pleading with Alice to believe her.
“Really?” Alice questioned, “Then how come when I tried to hug you, you pulled away from me?”
“Al, I didn’t mean to pull away, it was just that the door was open. I didn’t want anyone to see us.”
“Dane, we’ve lived in that house for over three years, I think our neighbors have figured out that we’re ***** by now.” Alice glances quickly at Dana, to try and read her, but then suddenly turned her gaze to the wall, “Dane, you pulled away from me, like…like the thought of me touching you was like totally gross or something?”
Dana scooted up closer to Alice and took her face in her hands, “Baby, is that what you think? Is that what got you so upset?” Alice nodded, still unable to make eye contact with Dana, “Touching you has never been gross. Touching you has given me more pleasure that I ever thought I could feel. I’m sorry you thought that, I’m sorry.”
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I have finally caught up with your story, i’ve been reading for weeks., and what a chapter i eventually get to comment on. I am nearly speechless. WOW, WOW, WOW! <-I said nearly.
That was really really excellent – you know I love this story but that was definitely your best chapter. I particularly enjoyed the interaction with Alice and Bette/Robin. So like a drunk Alice would be!!!!!! Really looking forward to the next chapter – what is in the letter???………oh yeah and the sex scene was kinda hawt!!!
wow. that was great. i actually got a bit teary-eyed. i love danish and thank you for dana finally showing alice the letter. can’t wait for the next update. great job!
Noooooooooooooooooo what a way to leave it,grrrrrrrrrrrrrrr, i hate cliffhangers, dont leave us hanging for too long, this chapter was wonderful, i hope Alice stays and does’nt go to W.D.C. You have got my head spinning..lol.
Thank you.
oi,dont leave us hanging here!!!! What an amazing chapter…wow
God you are good at dragging this out, and yet its always enough to pull us in for more. Of course, i cant wait for the next chapter so get a move on it. :) *****
lol “you work for IC”, O_o really? haha ok better post soon, I only forgive you ’cause the sex scene and all the argument was great!
Oooh… what’s in the letter? What’s in it that causes so much drama? Where’s the next chapter?
CCCCCUUUUUUUUUUUUUMMMMMMMMMMM OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONNNNNNNNN! update soon i’m sooooooooooo p’od that we didn’t get to see it yet! Ah! But that was fuckin’ awesome chapter! Update as soooon as you possibly can, Love it as always!
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO, You’re going to make us wait a week aren’t you. You can’t do this to me. I’m running out of food, my friends think I’ve left the country. All I can do is wait and check my computer. LOL Looking forward to your next chapter.
You just wouldn’t tell, I’m on the verge of pulling my hair out lol. That was wonderful, the sex was hot and emotional at the same time. Please, please update soon before I really go crazy.
betru2u checking in. OMG this chapter was incredible. I think you managed to trigger every single emotion I have. Yet, you still had to keep us waiting just a little longer for the big secret to be revealed LOL! Admit it, you work for IC. ;) I’ll be waiting patiently for the next round. Btw, the sex was hot!
CRAP-CRAP-CRAP-CRAP-CRAP-CRAP-CRAP-CRAP-CRAP!
That’s all I was thinking when I read how you ended this. Luce, you’re driving me crazy here! I hope you’re happy that I was crying for most of this one too – even during the HOT sex scene! I complain, but you know I love the tease. (hey, my “skip-a-chapter” plan worked!)
Ok, I have spent the majority of the day and night reading all of the chapters to this story. This is an outstanding story! I love it, love it, love it! Your writing ability to tell a story is fantastic. You are awesome at describing scenes, you use direct quotes perfectly and grammatical it’s wonderful. Keep up the unbelievable great work! I cannot wait to read the next chapter and the next and the next, etc… I love it!
Finally something happened! I hate (and LOVE) your cliffhangers :D Danish can solve the stalker problem together! Hopefully you are not going to make us too long *fingers crossed*. *5*
Loved the pace of this chapter. And the cliffhanger is so perfect that this time I don’t mind it all, provided you post again soon, that is!
just found your fic here and good job! just when i thought i could know the real reason, u left it there…please update ASAP.. :)
Were are you. I’m a little worried haven’t seen anything from you anywhere, here or the media boards. I hope your OK. I know you’re from the US I just hope not the Gulf coast.