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Lest I Forget (5a)
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She handed me my food and looked over Alice as I ate, changing a couple of her IV bags and taking her blood pressure and temperature and all. She checked the catheter bag too, which I know had to be embarrassing for Alice. We’d always joked with each other that if we ever got to the point where one of us couldn’t pee on our own, then other was to buy a gun and start firing. It had seemed so silly and ridiculous then, but it made me unbelievably sad to think about it now. Gemma tried to take both our minds off of it with her chatter, and she succeeded somewhat. Before long, she mentioned that from the doctor’s notes on the chart, Alice would be able to control her movements a little more as the days went on. Probably not by leaps and bounds, but it was something, and at that point any good news we got was enough.
“Okay, Alice, are you ready to try drinking something? I know your throat has to be really dry by now,” Gemma said softly when she’d finished all her other tasks. She glanced over at me and smiled when she saw that I was almost done eating. “Dana, you can take over for me after a few minutes if you want to. I’ll just get her started, okay?” she asked, picking up the container of apple juice and a straw.
“Okay, now go slow. I know it’s an awful question, but you remember how to swallow, don’t you?” she asked humorously. Alice obviously didn’t answer, but Gemma didn’t seem to mind very much as she put the straw in Alice’s mouth. I think we were both a little surprised when she closed her lips around it without too much effort. After a few halting attempts, Alice was able to take sips of the juice. “Go slow or you’ll end up doing yourself no good,” Gemma warned as I finished my meal and stood up to approach the bed. “She’s doing great, all you really need to do is hold the container and the straw for her,” she instructed. I took them from her and watched Alice drink her juice, fascinated. It was such a small thing, but it did me a world of good to see it.
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hey! Sorry for not commenting on the 4th part of this story. I was wondering the whole time if you updated it, I just appearently didn’t see it. But hey, that gave me two parts at one time!Lovely wedding and wonderful wedding night. Just everything about it was beautifully written and described. Them first just sitting down on the couch after they got home was kinda typically danish and it fit somehow. I found it sweet. And don’t worry, you did a very good job with the first person writing. Loved it!
Beautifully Written….and HOT!I love thier relationship!
As I said before, better and better – oh, and hotter and hotter … Wow!! Wonderful, fantastic, bravo, more!!
I guess I was overwhelmed by the 2 paragraphs and the last line “I was truly saying goodbye to her just sent me over the top and I had to take a break. This post is another great piece of work. S’s toast was right on and touching. I am glad that that the rest of the chapter is more about happy Danish, I was a little apprehensive that I might keep crying for the rest of the chapter. Then you showed us the humor. “…couldn’t pee on our own, then other was to buy a gun and start firing,,. and racing each other to the bedroom, classic! I might have mentioned this before, and I will say it again, you have to be the “Yoda of Danish.” I have not read one piece of your work that would negate my opinion. You have A & D down pact, writing as if you were themselves. And please do not second guess yourself. I echo what MaGoose said, “excellent first person NC-17.” Just awesome MT. Thank you.
MT great story I love it you are an amazing writer keep it up
MT great story I love it you are an amazing writer keep it up
I’m thinking of contucting a petition drive for keeping Alice alive in this story ;p. It’s too haaaard!!! So, hereby I ask, beg, plead for this fanfic to be a little sci-fic… Anyone join me? ;) just kiddin’ (well, half true). Anyway, I loved it as always MT, so once more eskerrik asko!
The first part was very moving. I could totally picture the two of them being all caught up in their own little world on their wedding. And the second part…damn, that was the hottest strap-on scene ever! :D L3 is only 3,5 weeks away. I’m counting the days!
wow…that’s the only word i can form. i almost stopped reading after the 1st page to tell you how fn amazing and touching dana’s breakdown was written. but i forged on and the rest of this is just…wow.
Okay I didn’t think I was going to get through the first page. Dana’s breakdown almost did me in and was very affecting. I think eveyone who’s reading this will agree that your writing from Dana’s perspective is just spot on. Shane’s speech at the reception was just exactly what I would’ve imagined from Shane! Back at the apartment… Dana and Alice’s slow burn was very Danish. However the line, “But I love the way you beg me when I wear it, and the way you moan for me when I use it,” OMG. Anyway, it was a pretty hot little scene in a very good chapter. I reaaallly wish Alice’s condition would improve, or at the least case we get “many” more chapters of happy memories. Great writing!
Well, I think we can say that you mastered writing a sex scene in the first person pretty successfully! That was great, I loved the whole scene in the living room after they got home…so tender. It’s so sad to know that despite all the good times this ain’t going to end well! Draw out the memories for us please!!
im speechless……that was aaaamazing muted how is it that you get better and better every single time you just exceed my expectations again and again your a genius writer is it your profession, can i ask that? neways blew me away so sweet i hate thinking that she’s gunna pass away tho if only she didnt have to, miraculous recovery perhaps? yay! i’d believe it :)
awesome. really, really, really beautiful. :)
wow wow wow muted, it takes a lot for me to cry with the written word, but somehow your words touch my heart. you have an amazing way of describing the love of dana and alice, it is truly a gift and i feel greatful that i have the opportunity to read it. PPS and well done as always.
Loved Shane’s speech at the wedding. It just shows that your dialog talents are not limited to Danish. And, might I say, you did some excellent first person NC-17. The strap-on thing? HOT! I’m with wonderingaloud — please draw out the happy memories. And with sonny_gal wishing for a miraculous recovery — although I know there won’t be one. I do have to keep reminding myself that they have had 37-some-odd years together and that no one lives forever…and that they are fictional people. You and the other great Danish writers make them seem so real (plus the incredible acting in the first three seasons by Erin and Leisha). Thanks so much for the new chapter and the great story!
Nothing cheers me up more than reading some happy Danish! Yay!! Such wonderful memories written so beautifully that it feels as though we’re all reliving these happy moments with them. Dana’s breakdown was so real and understandable. Well Done hun :D
I have just finished reading 2 paragraghs and I am bawling. I need some time out before I continue. This is so unbelievable.