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Phobia (Chapter 6)
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“At least they’re talking and not fucking.” I said while drying the back of my head with the towel Carmen had thrown at me after we walked into the bedroom suite.
“Oh my god.” She sounded irritated that I kept on about Dana and Al’s situation. “Would you stop with that already?”
“I’m sorry, but do you know what usually happens when those two are alone together in a bathroom?” Carmen didn’t say anything and when I turned back to look at her, her eyes suddenly shifted from my chest to staring out the window again. It was probably nothing more than my wishful thinking that she was checking me out. “What were you looking at?” I teased her about it.
“Huh?” She tried to look innocent but didn’t quite make it when her eyes traveled south of my neck again, making me laugh. Apparently, she didn’t find it amusing and gave me the finger when I couldn’t stop laughing. However, when she flipped me off, something on her hand caught my eye.
I ceased drying my hair and dropped the towel to walk over and get a closer look. Once I held her hand up, she attempted to free it from my grasp; yet when I realized my guess was correct, I stared into her eyes with deep confusion. “Carmen?” She appeared guilty and looked away from me. “Why are you still wearing the engagement ring I gave you?”
Dana-
“I guess Shane got her payback.” Alice muttered, her eyes never leaving the door Shane and Carmen had just exited from. I opened my mouth to speak but I didn’t know what to say. The one minute I was having a deep conversation with Alice and the next, Shane and Carmen came bustling through the door and although they were gone within seconds, I’d surely be having nightmares of Shane’s nearly exposed breasts; an image like that might’ve been Carmen’s cup of tea but it certainly wasn’t mine. “So you were saying?”
Glancing over my shoulder, I saw she was talking to me and again I tried to use my vocal chords only to stutter a few vowels before giving up and clearing my throat. I started over. “Sorry, what were we talking about?”
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Ok what is it with all the danish writer’s putting themselves down lately?! I’m telling you this is an awesome story and I love how you write it from 4 perspectives, its original and totally enthralling! Don’t doubt that. I really hope you don’t give up on this because I really will come over to your place and do some best friend talking to you! :P And awww for your so sweet comment, sadly yessum I have been rejected *sniffs* however thats a whole other story…or 5. Again awesome post and thanks! PPS :) xx
oooo and alice has dropped the bomb shell to dana…. wonder waht dana will do now.great chapter. love this story. love how it focuses on both sharmen and danish. i love it really do… can’t wait to read more – if more is by tomorrow;) post more soon..lol
Wow, I’ve finally caught up on all your updates, this is a fantastic fic and I love the different perspectives. And that things are not all simple between these ladies. I like that you had Lara have her own life and leave Dana, who was being an ass. And that Dana and Alice can still talk, no matter how hard it may be for them to get to that place. Excellent work, looking forward to reading more;) Please post soon!
I can’t wait to see how Dana reacts to Alice’s news
Alright, now i left you a message to further address you because if i wrote it all here we’ll it would take up a bit of space lol ANYHOW back to the story. Which has left me without any gracious words to say because you’ve heard them all and they all very much apply to this story but however i will try my best, it was FREAKINGAWESOMELOVELYFANTASTICBRILLIANTFUNNY yes that’s a word look it up… ok or it might just be 6 words…together. lol you’re good, you’re really good i really expected it to be DANA of course danish fool me it was UTA, which i was surprised and thought it was awesome. It really did want to make me cry (which by the way isn’t a bad thing, you write it so well, it’s actually a compliment, if ya made me cry lol) but yeah, me crying at the part with Dana in the bathroom, and then Alice and her having a lil chat, it was great. Now with Uta somewhat in the picture i wonder how that’s going to play out which i know you’ll fill us in on. Shane and Carmen, oh so cute and holy CRAP she still has the ring on? can’t wait for that part. Helena freaking out about little things was funny. Poor Helena she needs s1 in her life asap. and finally to end this which ended up being long anyhow you could never hurt me, it’s actually WAY the opposite so hush! and obviously PPS, yes it is a rather dire request :) x0x0x
hope you post more soon x
I only just found this story. I love it!! Any chance for a new chapter? Please??
ok awsome update but ahhhh the happy sharmen was torture , it was super funny but still those two are dancing around the inevitable again, please let them finaly figure it out i mean carmen still ahs the ring come on….shane wake up and go get her . thanx again you totaly came through , way to go, favorite author ever…
OMFG why u quick it??? i love it keep going pleaseeeeeeeeeeee…..pleaseeeee you’re killing me
And what happens next?…… Guess we’ll never find out :(