Fan Fiction
This story has been set to a rating of PG-13. Age verification is required to proceed.
Phobia (Chapter 6)
Login to add story to favorites
(0 votes, average: 0.00 out of 5)You need to be a registered member to rate this post.
Loading ...
Now her teasing ways had become senseless torture. Choosing not to finish what I started earlier, out of fear that Carmen might hate me for it, I took a step backwards to create breathing room. But I failed since the pool was right behind me , and this time it was too late for Carmen to grab my arm and keep me on dry land as I fell into the water. “Oh, shit!”
“Shane! Oh my god,” Her surprise was barely audible when I sunk deeper into the pool. Being under water wasn’t the worst part, it was lukewarm from the heating sensors placed in the interior walls, but when I resurfaced and sputtered out the water I’d inhaled from the unexpected fall, the icy breeze returned with a vengeance, stinging my face. “Oh my god, I’m so, so sorry.”
“Fuck winter.” My teeth chattered and my senses came back to maximum for the time being. It felt like being punched in the face over and over again with each attempt I made to heave my body back onto the concrete, but my arms were shaking too much for me to do it on my own. “Carmen, give me a hand up.” She was skeptical, yet worried. “Sometime today.” Patience wasn’t a virtue I possessed.
Hesitantly, she bent forward and extended her hand which I gripped with all my might. “Shane, if you pull me in, I swear to god.” I almost wanted to pull her in with me, to show her how it felt. Until I climbed onto the surface and retaliated in a different way; I wrapped my arms around her and clung to her back as she basically dragged me back to the door. “Jesus, you’re even lighter than you look.”
“Why can’t you guys stop obsessing over how skinny I am?” I couldn’t see her expression, but I already knew she was grinning at my annoyance. It’s strange how well two people, with more than a few problems between them, can take a break from everyday life and quit analyzing what might happen if they spend some time around the other’s presence, carefree and content. Too bad tonight had to end sooner or later.
Eventually, we made it back inside and as I stood on the floor mat , dripping wet, I glanced sideways to give Carmen the once over and saw that her clothes were scarcely damp while mine, on the other hand, were drenched and sticking to me like glue. Helena’s voice reverberated from the next room, instilling fear into me again. I turned to plead with Carmen. “Hey, can you go get me a towel or just anything at all to dry off with because Helena’s gonna flip if she sees me like this.”
Comments
Leave a Reply
You must be logged in to post a comment.
Ok what is it with all the danish writer’s putting themselves down lately?! I’m telling you this is an awesome story and I love how you write it from 4 perspectives, its original and totally enthralling! Don’t doubt that. I really hope you don’t give up on this because I really will come over to your place and do some best friend talking to you! :P And awww for your so sweet comment, sadly yessum I have been rejected *sniffs* however thats a whole other story…or 5. Again awesome post and thanks! PPS :) xx
oooo and alice has dropped the bomb shell to dana…. wonder waht dana will do now.great chapter. love this story. love how it focuses on both sharmen and danish. i love it really do… can’t wait to read more – if more is by tomorrow;) post more soon..lol
Wow, I’ve finally caught up on all your updates, this is a fantastic fic and I love the different perspectives. And that things are not all simple between these ladies. I like that you had Lara have her own life and leave Dana, who was being an ass. And that Dana and Alice can still talk, no matter how hard it may be for them to get to that place. Excellent work, looking forward to reading more;) Please post soon!
I can’t wait to see how Dana reacts to Alice’s news
Alright, now i left you a message to further address you because if i wrote it all here we’ll it would take up a bit of space lol ANYHOW back to the story. Which has left me without any gracious words to say because you’ve heard them all and they all very much apply to this story but however i will try my best, it was FREAKINGAWESOMELOVELYFANTASTICBRILLIANTFUNNY yes that’s a word look it up… ok or it might just be 6 words…together. lol you’re good, you’re really good i really expected it to be DANA of course danish fool me it was UTA, which i was surprised and thought it was awesome. It really did want to make me cry (which by the way isn’t a bad thing, you write it so well, it’s actually a compliment, if ya made me cry lol) but yeah, me crying at the part with Dana in the bathroom, and then Alice and her having a lil chat, it was great. Now with Uta somewhat in the picture i wonder how that’s going to play out which i know you’ll fill us in on. Shane and Carmen, oh so cute and holy CRAP she still has the ring on? can’t wait for that part. Helena freaking out about little things was funny. Poor Helena she needs s1 in her life asap. and finally to end this which ended up being long anyhow you could never hurt me, it’s actually WAY the opposite so hush! and obviously PPS, yes it is a rather dire request :) x0x0x
hope you post more soon x
I only just found this story. I love it!! Any chance for a new chapter? Please??
ok awsome update but ahhhh the happy sharmen was torture , it was super funny but still those two are dancing around the inevitable again, please let them finaly figure it out i mean carmen still ahs the ring come on….shane wake up and go get her . thanx again you totaly came through , way to go, favorite author ever…
OMFG why u quick it??? i love it keep going pleaseeeeeeeeeeee…..pleaseeeee you’re killing me
And what happens next?…… Guess we’ll never find out :(