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    Story written on November 6, 2005 by buildmeupbreakmedown.
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    Story Shortlink: https://lesfan.com/?p=57488
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    And she just looks at me… and smiles


    Just then there was a knock on the door. She wiped her sweaty palms on her jeans, straightened out her jacket (even though there were no creases), and moved to open the door. ‘Just breathe damn it’.


    She inhaled deeply and opened the door…


    “Hi! I’m from the hotels hospitality department and I have an order of 2 dozen red roses ordered by a Ms. Shane McCutcheon” said a very hansom blond haired blue eyed man who was slightly taller the Shane.


    “Are those for me?” said a voice from behind that time and time again made Shane’s stomach do back flips.


    It’s like looking into the sun you know


    The hospitality man stepped to the side to reveal the exotic beauty that was Carmen. Shane’s breath caught in her throat at the sight of her. She was wearing a pink spaghetti strap tank top that ended just below her belly button and a pair of low rise jeans that revealed the tattoo around her hips. Her raven colored hair cascaded down her back and shoulders, framing her beautiful face. But what caught Shane’s attention was her eyes, full of unconditional love and desire. It was like being in the best dream… ‘This is no mistake’.


    And I’m just blinking, mumbling, staring at my shoes


    The hospitality man just looked between the two women and decided it was best that he left. “Here you go”. He said as he handed the roses over to Shane who said an absent minded “Thanks”, but never looked at him once. And so he walked passed Carmen and gave her a small thumbs up so as the other woman couldn’t see it. She giggled slightly and thanked him.


    Shane was still caught up in the scenery. Her eyes shamelessly roaming over the body of this woman whom she regarded as a Goddess. From her head to her shoulders, rounded chest, flat stomach, perfect hips, strong thighs, athletic calves, and perfect little toes. An angel on earth…


    Carmen walked up to her and took the flowers from her hands. “Thank you. They’re beautiful”.


    “Not half as beautiful as you are” Shane let it slip before she had a chance to think of its possible cheesiness. She immediately ducked her head down and muttered an apology for sounding like a puppy love struck teenager, shoving her hands in her pockets and admiring the carpet pattern.

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    1. i love you! that was great!….and hot hot HOT! the song was a great backdrop for the story. wow shane asking carmen’s hand in marriage. thanks for a great sharmen story!

    4. This one should definately get an award! I loved this story! Makes me wish you’d write a sequal (cos this seemed like a stand-alone?). This made my little closet-romantic heart go pitty-pat lol. Seriously, very romantic; sweet beyond words; and as wittybanter said: “hot hot HOT” and the song did fit in here. Very nice. 5 stars for ya. No doubt. So, any way I, or anyone else, could possibly persuade you to do a sequal?? :D

    5. OMG!!!! this is da coolest shane ever. DAMN!! i hope carmen n shane get it 2gether to make dis last. oh dis is da sweetest thing in da world. **teary eyed** please post soon. PEACE.

    6. OMG!!!! this is da coolest shane ever. DAMN!! i hope carmen n shane get it 2gether to make dis last. oh dis is da sweetest thing in da world. **teary eyed** please post soon. PEACE.

    11. Puppy! I’m a sucker for foof, and you’ve combined it with some hot sex. This story would be stronger without the excerpts of lyrics or whatever they are.

    12. Great story, trying to make it hard on the rest of us are you. I’m so glad you’ve joined in. I hope you continue to write and I’ll continue to read. Great story and thank you. Deb

    13. Omg.omg.omg.That’s all I’m gonna say.;) Well I lie. YOU ROCK!!!!!! Love the song, love the story. I just wonder why did Carmen start to doubt if saying yes was the right thing to do? Does she think Shane will not go trough with it? And I must say that was one hot sex scene, totally made me horny:D Update soon PLEASE!!!

    15. So damn good. Shane’s romantic side is HOT! Pleasantly surprised by the proposal. What are Carmens doubts? Are they about herself or does she feel Shane is unable to completely change for this relationship? Con’t Please

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