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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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The very worst and very best thing about this moment was that Dana
could tell Alice felt the same. She could see it in the way her brown
eyes darkened with desire, she could feel it in the way pale skin
trembled, and some small part of Dana thought she could smell it though
she knew that was impossible since she wasn’t that short furry comic
book character with claws and superhuman senses that Howie had a crush
on when played by Hugh Jackman.
Alice felt the same as her, Alice wanted her, Alice needed her, Alice
desired her, but Alice was afraid and Dana knew it. There was no
denying it, not as the blonde pulled nervously back and thrust the full
glass of water at Dana, insisting that she drink it in overly cheerful
tones.
Though she knew it was her fault that Alice was scared Dana couldn’t
stop herself from feeling resentful and as she drank the water she held
Alice’s eyes in a steady gaze. Trying to pour everything she was
feeling in that moment into the look in her eyes and wanting more than
anything for Alice to see it and to be somehow forced to recognize what
they still had between them could never really be ignored. It was too
strong to ever properly attempt such a thing.
But Alice could be just as stubborn as Dana and when the athlete was
finished drinking her water she took the glass and set it down on the
sink. She wanted to speak, to ask if Dana needed help with the shower,
if she felt strong enough to stand on her own, having seen in recent
times where the tennis player had moments of near collapse but Alice
couldn’t find the words. Or rather, she couldn’t say them because she
found herself frozen with this impossible fear that Dana would remember
those times from all those months ago when she had hidden in the bushes
and stood on boxes and stared through windows like a fucking peeping
tom, invading the brunette’s privacy in one of the very worst ways
possible. And part of Alice didn’t trust herself to be near Dana when
she was naked. Something deep inside of her recoiled at the mere start
of the idea that she could do something to the athlete, that she could
imagine a forced or unwelcome touch directed at the woman she still
loved so very much. She didn’t want to think she was capable of doing
something like that but if you had asked Alice last year if she was
capable of car chases and stalking she would have replied with an
emphatic no.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again