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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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Dana looked like she was about to nod her head but a horrible retching
noise escaped her throat and she was pushing herself upwards to once
again throw up into the toilet. Alice winced at the sound and the
sight, knowing that as bad as it seemed to her it had to be a thousand
times worse for the athlete. She held the much shorter hair away from
the tennis player’s face while rubbing her back in a slow motion,
waiting until she thought Dana was done. When the athlete sank
back down to the floor, Alice rose up and grabbed a nearby hand towel
as she turned on the sink to wet it with cold water.
Sitting back down, Alice said softly, “Look at me.” Several seconds
passed at Dana didn’t do what Alice requested out of what the blonde
thought might have been embarrassment and she couldn’t describe how
that made her feel. This wasn’t the tennis player’s fault, it was the
treatment, and it certainly wasn’t anything Dana should be ashamed of
but she knew no matter what she said, the athlete would still feel the
same. That’s why she tenderly reached out to cup Dana’s face and turn
her head, ducking her head down to peer up into downcast blue eyes as
she said in something close to a growl, “Don’t you dare feel bad about
this, Dana Fairbanks. Everybody throws up in their life and most of
them end up doing it because of dumbass stuff like getting
fantastically drunk on yachts, not from fighting cancer.”
“I got fantastically drunk on a yacht,” Dana mumbled with the slightest
hint of humor, sighing at the feel of the cool towel on her forehead
and Alice’s hands on her cheeks.
“Yes, you did,” said Alice as she chuckled and rose up to wet the towel
some more. Finished wiping the tennis player’s forehead, she wiped her
mouth then peered into Dana’s eyes with a look of concern. “How do you
feel?” Alice asked carefully.
“I don’t think I’m going to throw up again,” replied Dana, instantly
realizing that’s what Alice wanted to know with her rather cautious
question.
“All right,” said Alice, smiling softly. She rose to her feet, tenderly
bringing Dana along with her and then she led them back into the
athlete’s bedroom. When Dana sat on the edge of the bed, she smiled
again and cupped her cheek as she murmured, “I’m going to clean up in
there and then I’ll bring you something to wash your mouth out with.”
She paused for a second and started to say something else but stopped
herself.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again