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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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My god, was it selfish.
Selfish to want Alice with her all the time, to want her comforting
words and touch, to want to see that soft look of affection that made
Dana feel so utterly loved. She was selfish to want all of this and
more when she had treated Alice so very badly and hadn’t even begun to
try and make up for it. On the second day of her hospital stay after
the lumpectomy Alice arrived, sneaking in the athlete’s favorite treats
with Helena Peabody as her accomplice, and though Dana knew they were
close, she hadn’t known the extent of that closeness until her visit.
Upon seeing the large bulky sweater that Alice was wearing, Dana
couldn’t help but wonder about the weather. It looked sunny and quite
nice from her window but if that was true, then why on earth would the
blonde be dressed that way? A grin quirked on Alice’s lips at Dana’s
confusion and in a rather grand gesture she lifted up her sweater to
reveal a flattened looking fanny pack attached to her midsection. The
athlete simply blinked at this and Alice made a noise of disappointment
then commanded Helena to remove the pack for her.
Watching Helena and Alice lightheartedly bicker and the British woman’s
playful mocking of Alice’s absolute aversion towards tootsie rolls Dana
felt an aching sort of longing. Because it was how they had been not so
long ago, her and Alice. They had acted the same, with an affectionate
teasing but also with an instinctive knowledge for the other person’s
feelings. And while Dana thought she still knew Alice well, that she
could read many of her expressions and emotions she couldn’t read them
all. Not in the way she used to.
But Helena could and what’s more, she knew what they meant. She knew
what that tiny frown at the corner of her lips was about and why Alice
had that wistful sadness lurking behind her brown eyes. All of this,
Helena had knowledge of and Dana found herself jealous of it. Though it
was hard for her to continue to feel that way when she also knew, just
by looking at the heiress, that she felt jealous too. Jealous of Dana’s
history with Alice, with that bond between them that just couldn’t be
broken, and how the blonde would return so easily and eagerly to Dana’s
side despite all that had happened in their relationship.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again