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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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“Miss Peabody,” drawled Alice, giving a saucy smile and pulling Helena
in for a hug, standing on her tip toes to bury her face in the crook of
her neck which was something of a tradition every time they hugged.
“You look like fucking formal and tall in six inch heels hotness. Are
you going out to another Foundation torture session disguised as a
fancy luncheon?”
“Yes, darling, however did you guess?” asked Helena with droll humor,
smoothing out her dress and sitting gracefully at their table. “Was it
perhaps the old biddy hair bun I’m currently wearing which you have
stated your lack of fondness on several rather loud occasions?”
“Hair buns make you look older,” said Alice as she scowled and wagged
her finger at the heiress. “And your hair looks so good down and curly
and all long and Harlequin romance as if it could start blowing
dramatically in the wind. Hair buns totally take away from that.”
“My mother approves of me looking older, she says that it adds to
producing an air of responsibility and therefore confidence in my
leadership of the Foundation,” replied Helena automatically, fighting a
grin because she already knew how Alice would respond.
“Your mom’s a bitch,” stated Alice dismissively, glancing at the menu
and wondering what exactly she wanted to order. “What are you getting?”
“I think the gnocchi al pomodoro,” Helena murmured, turning her
attention to the menu and trying to decide if she would truly prefer
that over the eggplant parma.
“Ohh, that sounds good,” said Alice, doing an wiggle in her seat that
Helena noticed often accompanied things she liked or found herself
excited over. “How about I get the eggplant parma and we do the usual
sharing routine?” she asked, looking up at her friend with an adorably
eager and hopeful expression.
“That sounds wonderful, darling,” said Helena, forming a warm smile and
chuckling when Alice released a happy noise and did yet another wiggle
in her seat as she reached for her menu, holding them as they placed
their orders with Samuel, their usual afternoon waiter. When he left
them with a promise to return swiftly with their drinks, she paused to
consider how to begin this discussion and felt it was best to go about
it in a natural way. “How are you doing?” she questioned softly,
feeling that surely this would lead to Alice saying something about all
the time she was spending with Dana. “And yes,” Helena found herself
interrupting as the blonde’s eyes gleamed with humor and she knew she
would be making a joke to avoid answering the question. “I do know it
cannot be all that good but as your friend I want to hear the details.”
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again