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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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Her mouth shutting slowly, Alice wore a wry expression then remarked,
“If you were my first grade teacher there’s no way I would’ve gotten
away with pantsing snobby little Melissa Adler, you know that?” Helena
simply smiled at this and didn’t enquire further about this childhood
incident and seeing her attempts to distract weren’t going anywhere,
Alice sighed and murmured, “Everybody keeps trying to push Dana and I
together. I try to tell them why I shouldn’t be with her and they act
like what I did was no big deal. I mean, I fucking stalked her Helena!
And I know you’re going to be all, I was hurt and I had reasons, but
that doesn’t change what I did. I keep telling them I can’t trust
myself to be good to Dana like I used to and they’re just ignoring
everything I say.” Releasing a disbelieving laugh, Alice looked up at
Helena with wild eyes that held clear agitation and said,
“It’s like they don’t care how I’m sure I’ll just end up hurting Dana
again because they’re fucking convinced she’s still in love with me.
But what good does that do if being in love with me just hurts her and
causes her more problems when she’s already fighting this huge horrible
thing?”
“Why are you so sure that you will hurt her?” asked Helena softly,
wanting to truly know why it was Alice was so very convinced of this
fact. “If it is simply because of how you behaved during that time I
think you ought to take into account that was the first and only time
you behaved in that manner. As such, why would you believe it would
occur again? Especially given how very determined you are to prevent
this. It makes little sense to me and to them I would wager.”
“I’m sure I’ll hurt her because I’ve already done it once and there’s
that whole once a whatever always a whatever saying, Helena,” said
Alice with definite agitation, seeming frustrated that no one, not even
her best friend could manage to see her side of things. “I don’t think
it’s worth taking that chance, especially when Dana is fucking sick
like she is. Yes, okay? Yes, I love her and yes I’ll probably always
love her but that doesn’t mean I’m fucking good for her and I deserve
to have her love me back after what I’ve done.”
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again