Fan Fiction
This story has been set to a rating of NC-17. Age verification is required to proceed.
All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
Login to add story to favorites
(17 votes, average: 4.76 out of 5)You need to be a registered member to rate this post.
Loading ...
“Then this is your punishment,” said Helena in logical tones, leaning
back in her seat and observing Alice with lidded eyes that to the
blonde always saw far too much. While she loved the British woman
dearly and treasured their friendship the problem with it, at times,
was the fact that Helena was a master at reading people and she was
especially masterful when it came to reading Alice. “Devoting your
every free moment to Dana, being close to her but never allowing
yourself to be truly happy, to love her and to let her love you, that’s
your punishment for the wrongs you perceived you have committed in the
initial period of your separation.”
“You’re lecturing me?” said Alice in a defensive cry, jerking back in
her seat and looking ready to stand up and perhaps leave except Samuel
had returned with their drinks.
Once they were alone, Helena reached out to firmly take hold of Alice’s
hand and say just as firmly but kindly, “I don’t mean to, darling. The
very last thing I want is to lecture or nag at you but I find I cannot
help it because I’m worried. You truly are spending your every free
moment with Dana and if above all else, you are adamant about not
repeating your past mistakes then perhaps you shouldn’t be doing that.”
When brown eyes lifted to look at her with slowly gained understanding,
Helena murmured, “That is what you did, isn’t it? Devoted your every
waking hour to Dana and thought of little else but her? I know your
intentions now are unequivocally different in nature but nevertheless,
there is that thread of similarity, don’t you think?”
“Yeah,” said Alice, releasing a shaky breath and squeezing Helena’s
hand in such a way that the heiress immediately knew that whatever
problem the writer might have had with her words was easily forgotten.
Swallowing hard, Alice’s voice raised in pitch, cracking slightly as
she said, “I’m scared though. I keep thinking that if I’m not there
with her… I mean, I know it’s stupid. Her treatment is going really
well. Hell, her hair hasn’t even all fallen out because of that new
cyclops sounding drug cocktail her doctor put her on.” Releasing
Helena’s hand, Alice picked up the nearby cloth napkin to unfold and
fold it in a nervous gesture as she continued, “But I can’t stop being
scared that she’s going to die and while I’m more scared of trying to
be with her again and going nuts and hurting her like I did before, I
can’t seem to stop wanting to be with her all the time. And so I’m
trying to be her superfriend again and I don’t think I’m doing a good
job of it, Helena.” Lifting her gaze and biting on her bottom lip,
Alice’s brown eyes reflected unshed tears as she confessed, “I can tell
she’s not happy and I know it’s not the cancer because it happens when
we’re alone. I’ll do or say something and she just gets this look in
her eyes… it’s just so fucking sad, it’s sadder than anything I’ve
ever seen.”
Comments
Leave a Reply
You must be logged in to post a comment.
OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again