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Love in Control – Chapter XVI – Who You With?
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He smiled at everyone as he left, even at the two women who were in the middle of an impressive catfight. He exchanged a quick look with Shane, and from the quick smile he saw, he knew that Shane would soon get the argument under control, before the shouting got any louder.
Shane subtly stuck her foot between Dana and Alice, glancing quickly at Lara, who was now just waiting patiently for Dana to move away from the driver’s side, so that she could board the car. Their chef friend looked tired and weary. Alice sometimes had that effect on people. “Lara, should I call an Uber, Lyft or something, or…”
“Don’t be silly, Shane. You’re all staying over with Bette and Tina, right? I can drop you all off and then head home.” Dana had moved over enough so that she could board the car. She slid her legs in as she sat back against the soft leather-upholstered seat with a sigh. She exchanged a quick smile with Dana, as the ex-tennis player stepped further away from the door, to allow Lara to swing the door shut.
Alice was having none of the premise underlying the friendly exchanges between Shane and Lara. “Wow, Lara, I gotta say, I’m surprised at you, offering to do that …”
Dana and Shane were incredulous, turned as one at Alice, and exclaimed simultaneously, “Alice!”
Lara opened her mouth to shoot something back also, but bit her lip. The aggression from Alice had started when Bette and Lara had come by to fetch Alice and Dana from the bar they’d been partying in in the West Village. As they’d boarded Bette’s car, and saw Lara sitting in the back seat, Alice’s shock at seeing her had loosened the acerbic side of the dirty blonde’s tongue. In fact, the occasional sniping and sarcastic remarks about Lara being Dana’s ex- had made everyone in the car uncomfortable, even the usually cool as ice Bette. Unfortunately, Bette’s driver elected to take the Westside highway to head uptown, instead of circling back to try other routes, and they ran smack into slow-moving traffic as they hit Hell’s Kitchen.
Alice’s snarky remarks were getting nastier until Bette finally put a stop to it. “Alice, I’ve had a long day, and Lara and I just crossed town to get you girls in the Village, only to head uptown through weekend traffic, because I wanted to get to catch up with you both before the party. I know that you’re also interested in doing so, in a much more pleasant way, so can you at least try to talk about something else?”
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Dear Lord, woman. You just get better and better. That was the definition of sexy.
Yes, i agree , sexy, very sexy!
Alice, one loud and weird girl. She never was my favourite character. Kick her out of the car and let her get lost.
Thanks for the update!
The book is ending soon, and that was the lead-in or appetizer for the next chapter, which will s-s-s-sizzle! Am debating whether I wrap the book up then or break the ending into two chapters. What say you? If I end it in one, the last chapter will make for a longer read.
Btw: I was advised recently that maybe I should consider writing in other places. I tend to write what I would read, and I look for rhythm, style, flow, voice, nuance, etc. in what I read so aspire to that when I write. These may not be the same things others here look for when they read, hence the advice. Since it takes some work and time to write, in the first place, (time I don’t have much of), maybe the advice-giver is right: it may we’ll be true that my idiosyncratic approach is not a good fit for readers here. Which is fine, btw.
Meanwhile, thanks for the comments @ssgogo93 and @Bibi28 ! I hope you’ll like how the book ends.
Long reads never bother me, it just means more wine.
This site has a rich history of writers of all styles and skill levels. Your particular style is unique, polished, creative, and very entertaining. I’m assuming this is the first and only site you post your stories. The FanFiction lane is an excellent entree into the world of writing, as it has a built-in audience eager for more creative stories that revolve around their favorite characters. You’ve evolved well beyond that. You’ve created your own world of interesting characters, each very colorful, distinctive, and lovable. You’re very talented and you obviously have many stories to tell. While I’d hate to see you go, you should definitely continue writing and perhaps explore different forums to share your work. Whatever you decide, please don’t forget your peeps here and let us know where we can find more @Skydancer musings.
Sky dancer!
Please continue with Bette and Tina’s storey and a little insight as to what happened to the gold and their lives together. Arron and Harley need to become the love of each other again!
I’m a. Believer!
I see you Tibetter001! Thanks for believing :-)
The gold story; Aerin and Harley — they’re coming back soon.
Will give you a head’s up when,
Keep warm til then,
S
Hi S.
Completely ecstatic that you replied, in fact I was so thrilled with the love and affection these two women have for each other I have continued with poems as well as lyrics to songs once again. I’ve always had an amorous nature and I have been blessed with a wonderful women who appreciates the romantic side of me.
B & T need more children to love on. I am depending on your good sense and writing talent to make their futures long and productive!
In Florida now but will get back to the snow and cold of Toronto soon.
Stay well my friend,
You may end this story in short form or long. Up, down, or sideways. Just as long as it makes you comfortable. If you are comfortable, we get more creative imagination. More imagination the better the read, and with your talent you would entertain the idea of moving on. We will certainly miss you here. Your material is so very appropriate here, This site was always good for bigger discussions and better arguments about all things L word. And when no one could decide what the production staff writers were thinking some one else would write a better edition and appease the masses. If you leave here please remember you will always have a fan club!
Hello,
Thanks for your comment! I’m thinking of writing differently, after this one concludes. Not so public; more intimate; and delivered specifically for a reader or small group of readers. Like a handcrafted cocktail, done omikase-style, by a bartender whose style you like. The drink takes some time to craft, has many layers of taste and flavor, but you wait patiently for your bartender to fix your drink because you know that she has time to do only a few such cocktails in the bar you’re in, then she’s off to do other bars. You’ll have to tell her if you like the drink, of course.
Let me know if you want to be one of them (one of the readers, I mean. Although I fully support drinking a cocktail, a handcrafted, well-prepared one, while you read. And only if you don’t drive after, of course!)
‘Til then, take care!
S
Intriguing, carry on