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Love in Control – Chapter XVI – Who You With?
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“Alice!!” Shane’s voice boomed in the empty lobby, overshadowing Alice’ shrill voice. “Cut it out!” She half-turned to the concierge who’d come up to help Lara with her platters and gave him a small smile. He gave her a quick nod and smile and turned smartly to lead them across the elegant black-and-white tiled floors, heading for the glass doors that sealed this elegant pre-war apartment building from the hubbub of Central Park West outside.
“Proves what I was just saying.” Alice kept grumbling as she trailed behind Shane, who’d made sure she came between Lara and Alice in this little procession. Given that it was now in the wee hours of the morning, it was a good thing there’d been no one else but the concierge around.
Shane spied Dana waving from the driver’s side of Lara’s new Mercedes car-like SUV. She motioned with her head to the concierge that they were to walk towards that car. Lara was walking resolutely in that direction already.
“Hey! I’m illegally parked, so I couldn’t leave your car on the street, wh-…” Dana paused as she saw Alice, who’d been bringing up the rear push her way past the concierge, eyebrows meeting in the middle, red-faced, eyes blazing. For some reason, the cross-eyed, red-faced emoticon that she’d just used to tease Alice with in a recent text came to mind, so Dana couldn’t help but giggle.
This made Alice even angrier.
“What the fuck are you doing, Dana!!”
“What do you mean ….”
Shane ducked under the gate that swung open to lay the platters she’d been carrying on floor of the trunk. She half turned to take the backpack and platters that the concierge had been carrying. “Thanks, Bill.”
He tipped his hat smartly. “Always a pleasure, ma’am.” He quickly shook his head when he saw Shane start to pull her wallet out. “Oh, no, no, ma’am, please. Miss Aerin gives all the building staff a very generous bonus every Christmas and even gets the other residents in the building to do the same. We’re always happy to help her friends and guests out whenever we can.” He was about to shut the SUV’s gate, and then remembered that the latest car models had self-shutting sensors, so stepped back. As he’d expected, the boot begun slowly shut itself. He could still overhear the full scale argument by the driver’s side door involving two of Miss Aerin’s friends, and rather than try to break it up, he took that as his cue to leave. “If there’s nothing else, I’ll leave you ladies now and bid you all a wonderful evening.”
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Dear Lord, woman. You just get better and better. That was the definition of sexy.
Yes, i agree , sexy, very sexy!
Alice, one loud and weird girl. She never was my favourite character. Kick her out of the car and let her get lost.
Thanks for the update!
The book is ending soon, and that was the lead-in or appetizer for the next chapter, which will s-s-s-sizzle! Am debating whether I wrap the book up then or break the ending into two chapters. What say you? If I end it in one, the last chapter will make for a longer read.
Btw: I was advised recently that maybe I should consider writing in other places. I tend to write what I would read, and I look for rhythm, style, flow, voice, nuance, etc. in what I read so aspire to that when I write. These may not be the same things others here look for when they read, hence the advice. Since it takes some work and time to write, in the first place, (time I don’t have much of), maybe the advice-giver is right: it may we’ll be true that my idiosyncratic approach is not a good fit for readers here. Which is fine, btw.
Meanwhile, thanks for the comments @ssgogo93 and @Bibi28 ! I hope you’ll like how the book ends.
Long reads never bother me, it just means more wine.
This site has a rich history of writers of all styles and skill levels. Your particular style is unique, polished, creative, and very entertaining. I’m assuming this is the first and only site you post your stories. The FanFiction lane is an excellent entree into the world of writing, as it has a built-in audience eager for more creative stories that revolve around their favorite characters. You’ve evolved well beyond that. You’ve created your own world of interesting characters, each very colorful, distinctive, and lovable. You’re very talented and you obviously have many stories to tell. While I’d hate to see you go, you should definitely continue writing and perhaps explore different forums to share your work. Whatever you decide, please don’t forget your peeps here and let us know where we can find more @Skydancer musings.
Sky dancer!
Please continue with Bette and Tina’s storey and a little insight as to what happened to the gold and their lives together. Arron and Harley need to become the love of each other again!
I’m a. Believer!
I see you Tibetter001! Thanks for believing :-)
The gold story; Aerin and Harley — they’re coming back soon.
Will give you a head’s up when,
Keep warm til then,
S
Hi S.
Completely ecstatic that you replied, in fact I was so thrilled with the love and affection these two women have for each other I have continued with poems as well as lyrics to songs once again. I’ve always had an amorous nature and I have been blessed with a wonderful women who appreciates the romantic side of me.
B & T need more children to love on. I am depending on your good sense and writing talent to make their futures long and productive!
In Florida now but will get back to the snow and cold of Toronto soon.
Stay well my friend,
You may end this story in short form or long. Up, down, or sideways. Just as long as it makes you comfortable. If you are comfortable, we get more creative imagination. More imagination the better the read, and with your talent you would entertain the idea of moving on. We will certainly miss you here. Your material is so very appropriate here, This site was always good for bigger discussions and better arguments about all things L word. And when no one could decide what the production staff writers were thinking some one else would write a better edition and appease the masses. If you leave here please remember you will always have a fan club!
Hello,
Thanks for your comment! I’m thinking of writing differently, after this one concludes. Not so public; more intimate; and delivered specifically for a reader or small group of readers. Like a handcrafted cocktail, done omikase-style, by a bartender whose style you like. The drink takes some time to craft, has many layers of taste and flavor, but you wait patiently for your bartender to fix your drink because you know that she has time to do only a few such cocktails in the bar you’re in, then she’s off to do other bars. You’ll have to tell her if you like the drink, of course.
Let me know if you want to be one of them (one of the readers, I mean. Although I fully support drinking a cocktail, a handcrafted, well-prepared one, while you read. And only if you don’t drive after, of course!)
‘Til then, take care!
S
Intriguing, carry on