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Love in Control – Chapter XVI – Who You With?
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“I got it, no worries.” Shane held a foot against the edge of the elevator door while she turned towards Lara and stretched her arms out. “Alice probably didn’t hear you.” She ignored the dagger looks one of her oldest friends was throwing her way.
Lara smirked as she handed Shane most of the platters. “Thanks, Shane.”
She took her time settling into the elevator, adjusting the backpack so that it hung more securely on a shoulder, nodding at Shane who was trying her best to fill the awkward silence with aimless chatter. The steam coming out of Alice could’ve poached an egg. “And I was just telling Aerin that the girls we’d brought with us from that place in the West Village couldn’t get over how posh her penthouse was…” Pause. Shane mouthed to Alice, “cool it, will ya?”
“And, wow, those mushroom and cheese balls things were soo good, Lara! How did you make those again?”
Shane’s inane chatter, that redhead’s cool reaction to all my attempts to provoke her, and the shitty way Dana has been handling all of this is … All the aggravation towards the red-headed chef that Alice had been nursing all night spilled over. She exploded with a string of curses that reverberated in the enclosed elevator space and then wheeled around to face Lara from across Shane’s suddenly tense body. “Oh, just shut up, Shane!”
She stuck her head closer towards Lara, chin jutting forward. This too-relaxed posture of the redheaded chef has got to be the cherry on top of the sundae of this messed-up evening. “What I don’t get is why you keep going after her when you two are so over? Like, you two are just sooo last year, Lara!”
“I’m not the one going after somebody, chica.”
The elevator doors opened just as Alice exploded again. “What the fuck did you just say??!!”
Shane turned to stand nose to nose with Alice. “Alice will you just try to control it for a minute, please? Aerin lives here. We’re her guests, and …”
“Oh, shut up! Why do you have to be such an Aerin-worshipper, Shane? Yeah, I know you’re all so buddy-buddy with her ever since you helped her get together with Harley back in LA a couple of years ago, and that she’s got this freakin’ Central Park penthouse and SI Swimsuit cover looks and tits, and genius IQ, and fat bank account. So just fuck her already and get over your crush, but don’t tell me to shu-…”
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Dear Lord, woman. You just get better and better. That was the definition of sexy.
Yes, i agree , sexy, very sexy!
Alice, one loud and weird girl. She never was my favourite character. Kick her out of the car and let her get lost.
Thanks for the update!
The book is ending soon, and that was the lead-in or appetizer for the next chapter, which will s-s-s-sizzle! Am debating whether I wrap the book up then or break the ending into two chapters. What say you? If I end it in one, the last chapter will make for a longer read.
Btw: I was advised recently that maybe I should consider writing in other places. I tend to write what I would read, and I look for rhythm, style, flow, voice, nuance, etc. in what I read so aspire to that when I write. These may not be the same things others here look for when they read, hence the advice. Since it takes some work and time to write, in the first place, (time I don’t have much of), maybe the advice-giver is right: it may we’ll be true that my idiosyncratic approach is not a good fit for readers here. Which is fine, btw.
Meanwhile, thanks for the comments @ssgogo93 and @Bibi28 ! I hope you’ll like how the book ends.
Long reads never bother me, it just means more wine.
This site has a rich history of writers of all styles and skill levels. Your particular style is unique, polished, creative, and very entertaining. I’m assuming this is the first and only site you post your stories. The FanFiction lane is an excellent entree into the world of writing, as it has a built-in audience eager for more creative stories that revolve around their favorite characters. You’ve evolved well beyond that. You’ve created your own world of interesting characters, each very colorful, distinctive, and lovable. You’re very talented and you obviously have many stories to tell. While I’d hate to see you go, you should definitely continue writing and perhaps explore different forums to share your work. Whatever you decide, please don’t forget your peeps here and let us know where we can find more @Skydancer musings.
Sky dancer!
Please continue with Bette and Tina’s storey and a little insight as to what happened to the gold and their lives together. Arron and Harley need to become the love of each other again!
I’m a. Believer!
I see you Tibetter001! Thanks for believing :-)
The gold story; Aerin and Harley — they’re coming back soon.
Will give you a head’s up when,
Keep warm til then,
S
Hi S.
Completely ecstatic that you replied, in fact I was so thrilled with the love and affection these two women have for each other I have continued with poems as well as lyrics to songs once again. I’ve always had an amorous nature and I have been blessed with a wonderful women who appreciates the romantic side of me.
B & T need more children to love on. I am depending on your good sense and writing talent to make their futures long and productive!
In Florida now but will get back to the snow and cold of Toronto soon.
Stay well my friend,
You may end this story in short form or long. Up, down, or sideways. Just as long as it makes you comfortable. If you are comfortable, we get more creative imagination. More imagination the better the read, and with your talent you would entertain the idea of moving on. We will certainly miss you here. Your material is so very appropriate here, This site was always good for bigger discussions and better arguments about all things L word. And when no one could decide what the production staff writers were thinking some one else would write a better edition and appease the masses. If you leave here please remember you will always have a fan club!
Hello,
Thanks for your comment! I’m thinking of writing differently, after this one concludes. Not so public; more intimate; and delivered specifically for a reader or small group of readers. Like a handcrafted cocktail, done omikase-style, by a bartender whose style you like. The drink takes some time to craft, has many layers of taste and flavor, but you wait patiently for your bartender to fix your drink because you know that she has time to do only a few such cocktails in the bar you’re in, then she’s off to do other bars. You’ll have to tell her if you like the drink, of course.
Let me know if you want to be one of them (one of the readers, I mean. Although I fully support drinking a cocktail, a handcrafted, well-prepared one, while you read. And only if you don’t drive after, of course!)
‘Til then, take care!
S
Intriguing, carry on