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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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And with their foreheads resting together, their faces close, despite
the lack of lighting Alice could see the tears in blue eyes and she
started to apologize but a searing kiss stopped her. Dana made love to
her fierce and urgent and when they were once again a tangle of limbs
and breathing heavily she said in the barest of whispers that Alice
always made her feel beautiful. From the very day they met, the blonde
had done that for her.
When you put aside the sardonic remarks and the gentle teasing, Alice
had been perhaps the only steady source of compliments and reassurances
Dana received in her life. She always knew the exact thing to say that
managed to charm and put the athlete at ease. To make her feel
beautiful and smart and special and it was oh so fucking addictive.
It was why Dana wanted and needed Alice with her always, though she had
somehow forced herself to forget this. She still didn’t understand why
they ended up they way they did. Why Alice became so clingy and
insecure and why she became so selfish and blind. Maybe it got to her,
that unexpected rush of utter confidence in herself after she came out
and got larger endorsements and more fans and a romance with the woman
she wanted since forever.
Howie would say Dana got a big head. That she became full of herself
and she lost track of what was important in her life. Caught up in the
heady sensations caused by having so many eyes on her in a way that
wasn’t disapproving or stern but instead awe struck and lust filled.
Being wanted by thousands compared to just one was something that Dana
couldn’t fight against. And she got so swept up in it, in the glitter
and the glamour and the endless approval she received wherever she
would go. But as this happened the further from Alice she became. Until
one day she wasn’t with Alice at all and they were at a distance so
painfully far apart that Dana wondered if they could ever find their
way back to one another again.
Now they had found their way back to each other because of this disease
and Dana knew it was petty and she knew it was small of her but when
Dr. Fields began explaining the process of having a mastectomy the
first thing that entered her head was that she was going back to being
unwanted. That she would lose the strangely magical Cinderella beauty
transformation she had gone through after coming out and it would be
the same as before, when she was closeted, and no one would want her.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again