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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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Some people might have thought that Alice was trying to change who Dana
was with those efforts but nothing could have been further from the
truth. It had never really been Dana during all those years of wearing
sundresses and carrying bulky purses. That was who she pretended to be,
who she thought her family and the world wanted, but it wasn’t her.
Arranging the haircut and shopping trip for a new wardrobe, they were
just another way that Alice was trying to help Dana come out. To
finally be herself and feel comfortable in her own skin because from
the start that was all Alice ever wanted from Dana. Was for her to at
last see herself for who she really was, to see that she was beautiful
and smart and charming and goddammit being a lesbian didn’t take any of
that away.
In fact, if you asked Alice, it just made it better.
Several months later, in the midst of their romance, Alice confessed
into the comfortable darkness as they snuggled under the sheets after a
long session of making love that she had been stunned by the
transformation. That she knew deep in her heart that when Dana finally
came out, when she finally was able to truly love herself for who she
really was, that she would be that much more beautiful because of the
happiness it would bring but Alice hadn’t been prepared for just how
beautiful she would become. At first she felt so very shallow and angry
at herself for the sudden attraction she felt towards Dana because of
the new haircut and clothes. Then how fucking unbelievably jealous of
Tonya she felt because she had been there for all those years before.
When Dana was miserable and holding herself back and now after the
endless talks and the reassurances and the gentle barbs Dana at last
understood that she was beautiful, that she was a person that could be
loved and wanted, and Tonya, whom Alice felt didn’t know or love Dana
for who she actually was, got to benefit from that.
There was such silence in the dark after Alice had said all of this,
enough that the blonde wondered if she had done something wrong. That
if the truth of her feelings on how Dana had never really been as
beautiful as she could have when she was closeted simply because she
wasn’t being herself and she wasn’t happy. And then she found herself
suddenly turned and trapped under the welcome weight of Dana’s body.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again