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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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She would return to how things had been. Where she loathed being in her
own skin and she couldn’t stand to have the eyes of people focused upon
her. So when she found out that the neoadjuvant treatment could reduce
the size of the lump and avoid a mastectomy she almost cried from joy.
Because it would be difficult enough to find a way to have Alice love
her, trust her, and want her again without having to deal with her body
being disfigured as well.
And she knew that it wasn’t proper and that it wasn’t politically
correct to think that but that’s how Dana knew she would feel if she
was forced to have that operation, no matter the skill of the surgeon
performing it. That she would feel disfigured and less of a woman with
her breast suddenly missing. It was odd to realize that because Dana
never considered herself particularly girly or concerned about her
looks but when she thought about it…
Part of her would rather die.
God, that was such a fucking truly awful thing to think but that was
how she felt and Dana was so very glad she didn’t have a reason to
voice this opinion. That the lump was small enough with the treatment
to avoid the more extensive surgery and while radiation and
chemotherapy tended to leave her fatigued and nauseous and it was
causing her hair to begin to fall out it was still far preferred to
having a mastectomy. She didn’t share this or her increasing insecurity
about her looks because of the side effects of the treatment with
anyone but somehow, as always, Alice knew and she had just the right
thing to say.
Late Wednesday afternoon, after finishing a wandering and casual lunch,
they curled together on the couch, listening to music as they read from
their separate selections. Dana flipped through the latest issue of
Tennis Magazine and Alice was busy rereading The Time Machine Did It.
As the times before, Dana had her head resting on a pillow in Alice’s
lap and lulled into near sleep by the caress of the journalist’s
fingers absently combing through her hair.
Chuckling softly at the bumblings of private detective Frank Burly,
Alice slid her fingers out of Dana’s hair to flip the page. As she did
this, the writer couldn’t help but notice several brown strands that
were in her grasp. Repressing the urge to verbalize the sadness she
felt, Alice bit her lip and carefully lowered her book. She had noticed
the slow but steady thinning of Dana’s hair since she began the second
part of her radiation and chemotherapy treatment but she stopped
herself from saying anything. Thinking that it was best for the athlete
to come to her but she was doubting that would ever happen.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again