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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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Certainly the make believe Dana fit far better into her parents world
of Republican fundraisers and black tie country club events. But as
much as she wanted to fit in, to be that person she thought her parents
wanted so very badly, she could never seem to do a good job at it. Her
attempts at looking what she felt to be typically heterosexual tended
to result in sundresses and clothing that managed to make Dana feel
even worse about herself. Which puzzled her because as a child, when
she had dressed up and gone out for the night with her parents she had
loved it so much. And because of her mother the dresses, make up, and
hair style during those times were always far more complicated than
what Dana did herself as an adult.
That being so, how could she have possibly loved it? Looked forward to
it even? Perhaps it was because when she dressed up those times as a
child it had been what she wanted to do. But as an adult, though no one
was sticking a gun to her head and telling her to put on the plain
brown pantyhose, Dana felt that it was forced upon her.
When she first became friends with Alice, the writer commented on her
wardrobe, or lack thereof, and at first Dana thought that it came from
nothing more than her usual teasing. Then one day, she said as much to
Alice and her smile slowly faded and her eyes became so very sad that
Dana hated herself for causing them to look that way. And she started
to say as much but Alice gently stopped her and said the reason she
kept bringing up the sundresses and the bad executive power skirts was
simply because they weren’t really Dana.
Being closeted was bad enough, Alice said, but Dana was forcing herself
to not only act the part but look it as well. Which was just a more
effective way of repressing who Dana was. Then she gave a wan but
quirky smile and remarked that if the athlete was so determined to play
a straight girl she should at least wear clothing she liked while doing
so.
Only days after coming out and fearing she ruined her relationship with
her parents forever, Dana found herself forcibly removed from her bed
and unknowingly making prank calls to her mother because of Alice.
Though she should have expected it, Dana was surprised to find herself
sitting in a chair at Shane’s salon and participating total image make
over.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again