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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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“I don’t know, I never looked it up in the official Scrabble
dictionary,” said Alice, shrugging her shoulders and grinning impishly
when Dana groaned in frustration at her response. They were quiet for a
few moments, then Alice ran the pad of her thumb across the tennis
player’s tanned cheek as she murmured, “Shane could cut your hair too.
That way if you wanted to have a wig later on it wouldn’t really be
one, because it’d be your own hair, you know?”
“You noticed it’s falling out,” said Dana gruffly, squeezing her eyes
shut and turning on her side, her face buried into the cushions of her
couch. Her vision was nothing but black but somehow she could still
picture Alice’s face, beautiful but lined in that awful sympathy she
hated to see. She didn’t want that from the writer, she didn’t want
fucking sympathy and pity, she wanted her love. But more and more she
wondered if wanting that was futile.
Silence and then Dana felt warm breath tingling against her skin and
gentle hands caressing her back as Alice said, “Only because I mess
with your hair so much. If I wasn’t such a touchy feely freak, I
guarantee that I wouldn’t have noticed.”
“You’re not a touchy feely freak,” Dana protested, though her voice was
mumbled as she continued to keep her face buried in the cushions.
Although now she had her eyes open for some reason. Which meant she was
no longer looking at darkness but instead fuzzy beige couch material.
“Do you think I should get my hair cut?”
“Only if you want to,” said Alice gently. There was more silence and
then the noise of slight movement and suddenly Dana felt herself
embraced from behind, the blonde’s body pressed up against the length
of hers and she sighed. Her body going lax as she sunk into Alice’s
arms. Warm breath once again hit her skin as Alice continued, “Can we
talk just, I don’t know… sort of realistically about this, Dane?”
“Yeah,” said Dana, squirming slightly so she could look up at Alice,
wanting to reassure because of the hesitation and fear she heard in the
blonde’s voice. “We can.”
“Your hair is going to keep falling out,” Alice said in a bare hush,
her expression was pained at this thought and she sighed, fingering the
brown locks and looking so very sad. “It fucking sucks that it’s a side
effect of the treatment which is going to make you better. I think
maybe, if you get your hair cut shorter, not only can you use it to
make a wig later on, but somehow it might not hurt as much.” Shrugging
her shoulders and appearing utterly annoyed at herself for lacking the
proper words, Alice said, “Like maybe there’s less to lose.” She
released a noise of pure aggravation and muttered, “Forget it, okay
Dane? It was stupid and I probably just hurt your feelings. I mean,
it’s not like you’re not still gorgeous. You always will be fucking hot
no matter what your hair looks like and I don’t know what I–”
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again