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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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“You’re not useless,” Dana said in firm tones, frowning deeply and
staring at her friend’s slim shoulders as they walked along. “Even when
you were a casanova you were one of the best friends I’ve ever had.”
Her voice filled with more than a little self disgust, she said, “I was
horrible to you when I was closeted but you never held it against me.
You tried to help me with girls and when I came out you did my makeover
for free.” They were now in the bedroom and Shane had stopped in her
walk to turn and study Dana with dark eyes that were veiled with
concern. “Don’t ever say you’re useless, Shane. Because for me and
Carmen and I can’t even say how many others you really aren’t.”
Releasing a short laugh, Dana rubbed at her eyes that were misty with
tears and said, “You’re probably only sane influence in our lives, in
fact.”
“Dane?” said Shane in a soft and worried murmur, putting the case down
on the bed and walking over to her friend to clasp her arms in a gentle
embrace. She ducked her head down to meet their eyes and when she did,
she asked, “You okay?”
“No,” said Dana, sniffling slightly and rubbing at her eyes some more
before she gave a long shuddering sigh. Sinking into Shane’s arms, she
rested her head on the hair stylist’s shoulder and her voice cracked as
she said, “I don’t want you to think you’re useless, Shane. I was
horrible to you when I was closeted, god, I was so horrible to so many
people and I don’t want them thinking that’s what I’m really like. And
I can’t leave things that way, you know? But it’s almost too much. I
don’t think I can even start to fix it all…”
“Why would you be leaving?” asked Shane, a lump building up in her
throat and a sickening sinking feeling taking over her stomach as she
wondered if maybe Dana wasn’t fighting against this disease as hard as
they all thought she was. “Your treatment is going good, isn’t it?
That’s what you said yesterday when all of us met up for lunch at The
Planet.”
“I don’t want to die but I can’t stop thinking about it because I know
it could happen,” Dana confessed in the quietest of whispers, pulling
away from Shane and taking a slow and mechanical walk over to her
dressing table. “And the more I think about it the more I get scared I
won’t have enough time to fix everything I did wrong. If I die…”
Dana’s voice trailed off and Shane watched as the athlete reached out
to tightly grip the Mahogany wood, her knuckles turning white from the
pressure. “She has to know how much I love her. I can’t leave her…
no, I won’t leave her thinking I’m scared and she was the one who
ruined things between us because it was just as much my fault things
fell apart as it was hers. Actually,” she paused to release a bitterly
sad laugh that caused Shane to wince. “It’s probably more my fault
since it was what I did that made her act that way. I’m the cause and
she’s the effect.”
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again