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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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“You can’t,” said Dana in between her tears, sounding heart broken from
having to say this. Shaking her head side to side, Dana’s trembling
body began to calm as she said, “I don’t think anyone can.” Pulling
away slowly, Dana seemed to calm even more as she wiped at her eyes
with the back of her hands. Then she looked up at Shane with a sad and
sober stare and whispered, “Because I made her afraid to be in love
with me.”
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After each treatment session Dana would get quiet. It wasn’t the scary
sort of quiet or the cute shy kind but a thoughtful quiet that
reflected a contemplative mood. Normally Alice would allow this quiet
to last around thirty minutes before she ended it with a casual
comment. The quiet had lasted for about ten minutes during their drive
when Alice noticed the longing expression that Dana wore as she gazed
out the window at the distant beach scenery. An impromptu plan forming
in her mind, Alice grinned happily and missed the first in the series
of turns that led directly back to the athlete’s condo.
“Al?” said Dana, frowning in confusion. “Where are you going? You just missed the turn.”
“On purpose!” Alice declared with a huge grin. Taking one hand off the
steering wheel she waved it in a large and rather grand gesture to
where they were now headed. “We’re going to the beach, Fairbanks. I
think we’ve both had enough of the stimulating sites of the hospital,
your condo, my apartment, and ever faithful The Planet. I think we,”
she drawled while she lifted up an eyebrow comically. “Need some beach
blanket bingo.”
“I don’t know who I want to be, Frankie or Annette,” said Dana,
grinning and suddenly feeling that much happier. Until that second she
hadn’t realized just how sick she was of going back to the same places
over and over again. Taking a trip to the beach with Alice was a
wonderful change of pace. “I liked them both equally in those movies.”
“I’ll be Frankie. I’m more butch anyway,” remarked Alice easily.
“You are not more butch than me!” cried Dana with something close to
outrage. They had this discussion countless times and the tennis player
still couldn’t quite grasp how Alice thought she could be more butch
than someone who played sports for a living. “Stop saying that. There’s
no way you can be more butch because you run like a girl.”
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again