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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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“Then tell Alice how you feel,” said Shane simply. When Dana’s head
jerked up and her blue eyes went wide, she said, “If it’s got you torn
up in knots this bad, Dane, then tell her. You have to or it’s going to
keep eating at you and that can’t be good for your treatment. For you
to be distracted and miserable and hating yourself for how you and Al
broke up. You’re cleaning your body of the cancer but not your heart.
It’s still getting eaten away because of this guilt you have and it has
to stop, Dane. There’s no way you can get better if it doesn’t.”
“I know,” Dana whispered, her voice nothing more than a hush and her
head hanging low as she slowly sat down in the chair in front of the
dressing table. Her gaze fixed on her hands that were clenching and
unclenching in a nervous gesture, she continued, “I want to tell her
everything, Shane. How I was insecure about my feelings because I had
so little experience next to her. I had only been with four other women
when we got together and the only time I had really been in love was
when I was sixteen but I was a kid then. I was so scared because I
didn’t trust myself to know what love really felt like and when Lara
came back and I was still attracted to her I felt like that meant I
wasn’t really in love with Al.” Looking up at Shane with watery eyes
and her face lined with an almost unfathomable sadness, Dana choked
out, “And I broke up with her and I ruined things so much, Shane. It
was like I destroyed her with the way I handled it and she was hurt so
badly but when I came to her and told her I was sick it was like that
all went away. But that was only at first because now I can see the
difference. She has to think about it when she wants to hug me or give
me compliments and sometimes even when she does she gets this look like
she’s afraid I’m going to scream for the police.”
“Dane,” Shane breathed her name more than said it. The night that they
found out about the tennis player’s illness she had known something
else was wrong. That her friend was again carrying a burden of guilt
and self hatred as she had done in the days when she was closeted but
she hadn’t known it was this bad. And now that she did know, despite
how angry Dana would be to learn this, she felt utterly useless because
she didn’t have the slightest idea of how to comfort her. Despite her
romantic reputation she had always been someone that gave reassurance
through words more than touch, although she did use both. It was just
that Shane had chosen her words carefully since she was a child and she
honestly felt most comfortable in speaking her thoughts low and
reasoned and soft to put her listener at ease. But she couldn’t do that
now because she was at a loss for what to say and so Shane walked over
to her friend and drew her close for a hug. Dana rested her head
against Shane’s stomach and her arms wrapped around her as she
cried. Bending down to kiss the top of the athlete’s head, Shane
rumbled, “Tell me how I can help.”
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again