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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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“I don’t run like a girl,” huffed Alice, forming a good natured scowl.
“I run like someone who hates running and tries to run badly on purpose
in order to frustrate the freakish people with her who like running and
end up wanting to stop because of how badly she runs.”
“I’m not sure how but I understood that completely,” Dana murmured, her
forehead lined in contemplation. A tiny grin tugged at her lips as she
looked at the blonde and said, “You know that you’re the only person in
the universe who would actually spend their time thinking up a plan
like that, right? Most would just say they don’t want to run.”
“The universe is a vast place, Dana,” said Alice in put upon somber
tones. “There could be others who fake girly running for the same valid
reasons as I.”
Releasing a soft snort at this, the tennis player rolled her eyes and
looked out the window at the beach which was getting closer by the
second. A light and excited feeling of happiness seized her and Dana
rested her forehead against the window and murmured, “Thank you for
doing this, Al. I didn’t know how much I needed it until now.”
“Hey,” said Alice in a quiet whisper, a hint of a frown touching her
features as she rested a gentle hand on the athlete’s shoulder. When
Dana turned to look at her, she smiled gently and said, “Whatever you
want and need, remember? That’s what I’m here for.”
“I remember,” said Dana as she threaded her fingers through the
writer’s for a tender hold. Looking up at Alice who had her eyes back
on the road, she said in an indecipherable murmur under her breath,
“How could I forget?”
A comfortable silence took over until they reached the beach and Alice
parked the mini, taking in their surroundings and the hot dog vendor a
short walking distance away as she did so. “We can get lunch later,”
she commented with a grin.
Following the blonde’s stare, Dana smiled upon seeing the hot dog
vendor. No matter how much she or Helena or any of their other friends
tried, Alice couldn’t be shaken from her love of eating unhealthy food.
“Sure,” she replied amiably as she opened the door of the car and got
out. “But after my stomach settles. I always feel nauseous…” Dana
trailed off not really wanting to say the words radiation or
chemotherapy or even treatment. Instead she swallowed her suddenly very
dry throat and decided on saying, “After.”
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again