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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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“Whatever you want,” said Alice quietly though a bright smile lit up
her features, one that Dana couldn’t help but return. Especially when
the journalist reached out to hold her hand and give it a squeeze.
“Well? What should we do first, Dane? Take a walk? Build a sand castle?
Hide from hermit crabs because you’re still traumatized one attached
itself to your big toe?”
“That crab was evil! You can still see the scar on my toe!” Dana
exclaimed, her cheeks turning red and instinctively squinting as she
looked at the beach for any suspected crabs hiding in the litter, such
as discarded soda cans, which the crab that had attacked her had done.
“Crabs aren’t capable of being evil, they have tiny brains. If you ask
me, it takes a somewhat large brain to be evil,” said Alice with a
chuckle. She smiled fondly as she watched Dana continue to search the
beach for hermit crabs and studied her profile. The tennis player
turned to her and started to say something but it faded away into a
sweet smile and before she knew it, Alice found herself lightly
touching the ends of Dana’s newly cut and far shorter hair. “Shane did
a good job,” she said in thoughtful tones, fingering the soft strands.
“You look great.”
“Yeah?” asked Dana uncertainly. Reaching up, she touched the back of
her hair and while the athlete wanted to thank Alice for the compliment
she wondered if it was really true or the writer was just saying that
to make her feel good.
Worrying about things like that was the reason why Dana hadn’t told
Alice of her feelings. That she was still in love with her and wanted
them to be together again because part of her wondered if maybe Alice
would go along with it just to make her happy because she was fighting
this cancer. And as much as she loved Alice, that was the last thing
Dana wanted. Yes, she desperately wanted them back and she would do
almost anything to repair the damage caused to their relationship with the
way things had ended but the idea of the journalist being with her out
of sympathy or pity or just that selfless kindness Alice exhibited so
often with her friends was enough for the tennis player to wish herself
dead.
For so long in her life Dana had settled for second best. She took what
she thought she could get and she tried to make herself happy with it
but it never worked because she was never really happy. Not in the true
sense of the word. There would be no settling when it came to her
feelings for Alice. It had to be all or nothing. A real and genuine
love, the kind that made her heart nearly beat out of her chest and her
head to feel dizzy at the slightest kiss. If she couldn’t have that
then as much as it hurt, Dana would rather be friends with Alice
because her heart wouldn’t allow anything else. When she was with Alice
again it had to be perfect and she had to be absolutely sure it was
what they both wanted. That they were both really and truly in love.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again